You need no feedback here (except the second "innocent" I believe should read "innocence".....other than that, this has great structure and great flow. Well done!
Beautiful work here, very good structure, easy to read but hits hard. You have a wonderful way with words and expressing what you feel using so little words.
I agree with MaryKC, you are a very brave lady. =)
Wow, I have read several of your poems now, this one really caught my attention. You are quite talented. I hope you know that. I really like your style of writing. I agree with all of the reviewers, you are a very brave young lady for sharing this. I hope you have found or will find peace with this.
If I'm reading this right than you're one brave girl for writing this. Experiences like these can stripe one bare of any strength or make you persevere in ways you didn't think possible. I think you're the latter. Through writing may you find the solace you strive for. :)
You are reading it right, The same thing I wrote about in The Evil, Thank you for reading it.
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This one is good. It just lack of imagery for me. Good rhyming though. Try to write more with free verse. I think you could be good at that. Write more! :)
I like to write poems that spontaniously generate in my mind. I am 17 and I am a girl who is in high school so my poems will not be amazing but I do my best.I love my spanish and ASL,I also love basic.. more..