Crush

It's a secret!

I see you every week. 

Every time I see you we speak.

We like the same things 

I have these feelings, so why not?

I have a crush on you.

I want you to know

But it is hard to show

I have a crush on you.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I very much like your simple straightforward confession in verse. I like the way it seems a little hesitant at first, but then I get the feeling of a full dive into surrender. Your word choices are a little one-dimensional & could be pumped up a bit to bring in more vivid imagery . . . try to show us what a "crush" looks like (goofy expressions) . . . sounds like (stuttering hellos) . . . smells like (moving in close for a sniff) . . . in short, details bring a poem alive. This poem is nice as is, but just think about using more vivid details in your future writings! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Ace Jaxon]

even I'll have to agree with you there Margie, and each word would be much more vivid if he used more visual words, but I also think this piece has a special meaning to them. At the same time I think your message explains all of that simply.

[nathan]

You know what I like most about this? It doesn't even seem like it's trying to be a poem. It's simple, it's nice... This poem to me is like a potato chip. That's the best way I can describe it.

[Wanaka]

This is so quit, with few words. Simple I like it.

[Ace Jaxon]

I think who ever the person is that it's always better to let them know even if you don't know how to... after all if you do that whatever happens you will be proud that you told them... (^w^)