Hearts in the Sand

let's have an adventure

take an eight hour drive

going anywhere and no where

let's leave this city tonight

we'll do some wrong

but hey at least we'll do that right

together let's drive

into the vast unknown, of the night

come with me

and replace every fear

with my arms

and I'll take away every tear

we'll make our great escape 

from everyone that will say

your heart he will break

I'll prove them wrong in every way

together our hearts have wings

so why not let them fly

if happiness makes angels sing

there'll be a concert tonight

hell we may even see them for a second

but our love will carry us on higher
even the heavens cant handle

this kind of pleasure

come with me

and replace every fear

with my arms

and I'll take away every tear

we'll make our great escape 

from everyone that will say

your heart he will break

I'll prove them wrong in every way

let's fly farther than the wind can take us

so far that no one can catch us

we'll let our hearts 

guide us through the dark

so come with me and take my hand

an adventure we'll take

to a wonderful place

where we can draw hearts in the sand

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Sweets]

This cannot be improved at all...I think it's 100% perfect!
The ending is really great...and it flows perfectly..
I don't think that there is any error in this poem.
Wonderful work!

[Tasha]

This would be an amazing song. You have an amazing talent, it blended together so well.
♥ Ta'Shandra

[Plagued Monumentally]

Was it completely cheesy of me to sing this out with a melodic tone in my voice? XDD

I loved this poem because it all flowed out perfectly. Great job.

[Carrion.]

you have an amazing talent. You can bind words together so well. Once again, grammar errors I think..

[biggerthenu]

is this a song?? love is a adventure nice write