My Curse

We all mistakes, this is about my worst

asphyxiating, hanging here by a rope

I'll look down, to the longing sea below

gazing below my feet and into the shallows

I wonder how I got myself here

unresting forever in your gallows

why did I let it get so far

and let myself lose control

I broke your heart

and you broke my fall

but not with open arms

rather a tightened noose

this is my curse

of self inflicting pain

I tried so hard to change

and I see it was all in vain

staring down into the sea below

I guess it's true, that we reap what we sow 

for if I deserved mercy, for my crimes

I'm sure that I would've been, able to die

but no, here I hang still alive

forever choking on every single lie

I broke your heart

and you broke my fall

but not with open arms

rather a tightened noose

this is my curse

of self inflicting pain

I tried so hard to change

and I see it was all in vain

this is my curse

and for it

I'll forever hang

 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Tkess]

Interesting write. Regret can be a heavy burden. I like the imagery of guilt and regret and hanging by the Gallows.

[biggerthenu]

sweet this is awesome

[Tasha]

Haunting, but an excellent flow of words.
♥ Ta'Shandra

[Plagued Monumentally]

I read the first word of the poem and I automatically got shudders. I've watched enough crime TV shows to know that that word makes for a haunting outcome. Anyways, I really liked the rhyme you did here. When I read it out loud it had sort of a flow to it that I always love reading in poems. This is definitely a step up from your other poems, that's for sure.

My favorite lines would have to be either: "I guess its true, we reap what we sow" or "forever choking on every single lie". Those to me had sense of logic and pain that I love seeing in poems. I'm really happy with the way this game out, Taylor. Thanks for sharing this with me. :)

[Carrion.]

I really enjoy this. I belive your supposed to capatalize the letter of every line though. I'm not sure. o.o"

[Bree]

Very nice, I like the pattern of the rhymes and flow of words