No Escape

I wish that I 

could turn back the sands

that hold time

in their unforgiving grains

flip the hour glass

and return the widow's bite

to expel the

poison of man

and re-write my future

to never lose for what I stand

I'm burning every picture

of the man I used to be

soon I'll hang myself

under the moon, for all to see

I'll spill my guts, is it everything

you always thought was inside of

inside of me

I'm so sorry for my betrayal

I'm sorry that I 

put you through hell

but where you once were

is where I now stand

consumed by the fire

of every once, good intention

so here I burn amidst the flame

where the rocks rise up

like iron bars, to a cell

and I lost the key

during my final fall

there is no escape from this

I have broken my wings

and lost my halo

I've fallen too far, to be saved

there is no escape from this

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Tkess]

"of every once, good intention" 11 lines up from the bottom, should this line be everyone's good intention? or are you trying to tie it back with the line "but where you once were"? If it is everyone's I don't think you need the comma, however if it is once I'm not so sure it makes sense.

Other than that, it is a very emotional piece. Maybe try to break it up into stanzas to make it a little easier to read, bu that's purely a cosmetic suggestion.