No Escape

I wish that I 

could turn back the sands

that hold time

in their unforgiving grains

flip the hour glass

and return the widow's bite

to expel the

poison of man

and re-write my future

to never lose for what I stand

I'm burning every picture

of the man I used to be

soon I'll hang myself

under the moon, for all to see

I'll spill my guts, is it everything

you always thought was inside of

inside of me

I'm so sorry for my betrayal

I'm sorry that I 

put you through hell

but where you once were

is where I now stand

consumed by the fire

of every once, good intention

so here I burn amidst the flame

where the rocks rise up

like iron bars, to a cell

and I lost the key

during my final fall

there is no escape from this

I have broken my wings

and lost my halo

I've fallen too far, to be saved

there is no escape from this

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Ian Faraway]

Well everyone gets there. And it's all about redemption and moving through challenges.

[Linear]

Man falls so many times, for so many differant reasons but stand up we must, the key is still in your hand.


Enjoyed :0)

[Bree]

Amazing.

[Truth_About_Rain]

Love this piece :D At times it seems a bit choppy, but it might just be me xD
Especially love the last lines :)

[biggerthenu]

i like i began to think about Judas til i reached the end nice write

[Maya Storm]

This is a pleasant read... The flow was extraordinary, I read and read and it just went on from beginning to end without a glitch.

My favorite part would be :
"to expel the
poison of man
and re-write my future
to never lose for what I stand"

Strong words... It will take you to stand for what you believe in to write that future well. Bravo!

[*Evelen*]

Everyone wants to take back something in life. Well done.

[Carrion.]

this reminds me of a ETF song a lil.. XD
amazing job.
youve improoved.

[kdpgrahi]

It is a better read than the previous one I have read recently. You have the right talent I can firmly say. Just carry on.