The Tease

I haven't slept in a couple days and i felt like writing about it

will somebody please

tranquilize my mind

and help me ease into a land of dreams

for day by day i zone

feeling more dead than dead

unfailing, im cursed, even at home

i just don't understand it

i try and try, but end up dragging

 myself through the grit

finally, after the blood and sores

i lay back in my bed, smiling, ready for rest

eyes shut tight, i reach to open the doors

that take me to wonder lands, and that happy place

but the doors wont budge, even in my moment of zen,

again, the sly sleep escapes, without me, again

Author's Note

feedback as always:)

Reviews

[Omar Fendri]

An outstanding vision... A vast imagination's well written here, rich with some vivid expressions 'more dead than dead' ... I like the idea of the struggling to reach your dreamland that it is cursed and closed even in your dreams... How you start creating the basics of the poem in the first lines' beautiful and gives the chance to the reader to relate with the whole idea 'will somebody please ... help me ease into a land of dreams' .
I like it.

[SilentVerses]

yearning passion causes sanity to fade as evading want deserts, anger and resentment for what you can't have creeps upon the skin of deadened flesh, moving on automatic u=your flesh cries for rest, short but effective.

[Dustin Reichmuth]

I like the idea behind this. Many a time I've attempted to write while I'm at the peak of exhaustion, and I applaud you for being able to do it much better than I. Great piece of writing.

[Kyla H]

This poem is written at the peak of your creative limits, it's outstanding. Being sleep deprived must allow you to see things differently, your brain functions less properly. I like the idea of gates within our minds, it offers new things for the reader to think of. Nicely done.