Now and Forever, and Forever More

i haven't written a love poem/song in forever so i figured i should. This is what came out

The sun is setting now

the stars are shining bright

nothing in so long

i swear, has ever felt so right

i look into your eyes

and see that shining light

but i don't, know 

what i did, to deserve you

but i will, show

you how i can, not live without you

By my side

'cause you guide me through the dark

in my mind

all i see is you smiling back at me

and it'll never matter how far apart we are

yeah you know that i'll love you

until the day that i die

The sun is rising up

you're lying next to me

maybe, baby, one day we will start

our own happy family 

we'll grow old together 

our love will keep it's youth

only time will tell

and that same time will prove

that you need me

as much as i need you

By my side

'cause you guide me through the dark

in my mind

all i see is you smiling back at me

and it'll never matter how far apart we are

yeah you know that i'll love you

until the day that i die

The sun is setting now

low below the mountain range

so beautiful to see

yet more beautiful

is you lying next to me

we've our family

and now age has run its course

together, tomorrow we won't wake

we'll stay in love in sleeps embrace

won't feel any remorse

we left it all behind

for our love forever more

Author's Note

ignore grammar, FEEDBACK, FEEDBACK....oh yeah and FEEDBACK please:)

Reviews

[Omar Fendri]

How your relate the circle of life with the rise and set of the sun is adorably done, artistically painted, cleverly illustrated.
I like the context of the poem and how vivid are the pictures and expression in it.
beautiful ...
n'ow age has run its course
together, tomorrow we won't wake
we'll stay in love in sleeps embrace'

[Bree]

This is beautiful. I love how it through life in the settings from young to old, that transition is very nice, and ran very smooth with the rest of the poem. I love it, so good.

By the way, thank you for the review on my poem! I appreciate it a lot and it was really sweet.

[Dustin Reichmuth]

There's definitely passion in this song! It's a lovely piece of writing, good job! I like the rhyming scheme of it, and the way it all flows together. Beautifully written.

[BlueberryKisses]

This is amazing! I think this is a beautiful love poem/song and each stanza is truly brilliant :) Its so sweet, great write!