Into The Valley

I lay in the field where i now slowly die

surrounded by ashes and my brothers cries

a bullet to the head would surely end it all

a quick stop for this never f*****g ending fall

there is no more light, no there is only pain

and around me blood falls like a torrential rain

i look into the sky as my vision fades black

i feel deaths arms around me, there is no going back

 

as i descend, into the valley

of long, forgotten souls

i feel his shadow, swallow up my own

he said son, listen to me

there is nothing, left to fear

for everything you know and love

ill end it all right here

 

tic, toc, time crawls to a stop

and suddenly i feel my heart now drop

so many things that i have left undone

the memories burning like the fire of an unsetting sun

and the embers of the loved ones, whose bridges ive burned

scar me so deep, that i wished i had learned

about life, before i had lied

and about death, before i had died

 

as i descend, into the valley

of long, forgotten souls

i feel his shadow, swallow up my own

he said son, listen to me

there is nothing, left to fear

for everything you know and love

ill end it all right here

 

there is nothing, left to fear

for everything you know and love

ill end it all end it all right here

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Omar Fendri]

'i look into the sky as my vision fades black
i feel deaths arms around me, there is no going back' I like the concept here.
The dark images are various and well written here. A very melancholic, pessimist and fearful view to Life which is deeply heartbreaking. The third stanza is my favourite, how time crawled and ate you alive, how all what's precious in your life started to burn. The end is painful for sure. I love it