1:30 a.m.

An Ode to us who's minds are never at rest.

Alas, again

the day is set 

the light above is being lured,

another day come and gone

another right another wrong

no more chaos to be endured

Once again, I'm here, myself

while the world here is 

sound sleeping,

I clear my mind 

and dream a dream

and am content with the company I'm keeping

The night sky is clear,

I close my eyes, and have no fear

Sometimes I sit and listen 

to the night

her hearts lone cry,

relating in the same

evading poising pain

swallowing down deeper, the life gone awry

but just like the setting sun,

I fear my fear has won

These nightly thoughts

depriving my sleep

as I drowsily ponder,

putting my stresses at bay

and my worries away

I simply let my mind wonder

Contemplating the above

and if I believe in Love

or just what lies beyond tomorrow?

The complexity of time

and if it's even worth a dime

or more of it can we solely barrow?

At peace in my own realm, as the people go to bed,

I simply die to myself, and live inside my head.

Reviews

[John Stussy]

An insomniac's tale and thoughts go flowing. Wonderfully related and portrayed through words.

[Bard Constantine]

I know well the feeling of being awake while the world around slumbers. I am more a night person by nature anyway... I'd love to have a schedule where I sleep during the day... This was a nice write about the nature of insomnia and contemplation, perhaps a small amount of revision would streamline it a bit. The last lines resonate, however... and that's what stays with the reader anyway...

[Wondering Mind]

fabulous ending to a lovely write at 1:30 am. The muse is a nocturnal creature.

[S. Kimball]

This was pretty good. Some of the spots in the middle were a little drab, but for the most part, this had a certain spark of beauty.

Your prose was a good choice for what you were trying to convey. The words came out and spoke quite well.

Your opening was a solid hook and your ending was a fantastic finish. Your ending is actually the best thing I've read in quite some time. "I simply die to myself, and live inside my head."

That's so hauntingly beautiful. Well done.

[boyinblue]

This was AMAZING! WOW! I won't believe if this doesn't have like, 100 reviews in say, the next 100 views. What you speak is true and felt by a lot of people, me being one of them. This was so well played and structured, I have no reason to criticize. It sums up my many of my thoughts in such a beautiful flow of words.

Living inside your head is an amazing way to end this, it really shows that you know what you're talking about.

I think this piece is the best example of having experience to write good poetry, I truly am 100% certain that you have been through this phase.

Keep it up--this belongs in the "Popular Writing" category.
Beautiful stuff man- even with its sadness.