Just go..

I just thought of this in school, i dont know why but it just popped in my head, it kinda sucks, but tell me what you think.

Please my dear, leave my be

Ther is nothing here for me

You can go out on your own

Please dont argue or raise your tone

My soul shall be with you forever

Dont let your heart hover

Keep it here and i'll keep it safe with me

I'll give you my heart and the key

Just move on and don't stay here with me

Reviews

[AllyKinzz:)]

A few spelling errors. Might want to go back and check that. The rhyming seems a little forced.

Good job though.

[victoria]

wow, this peom is really powerful. i can tell you really miss the person you love, and you do a great job portraying it. theres just 2 things i would like to point out, the like " i promise you my soul shall be with you forever/ dont let your heart hover" doesnt really fit with the rest of the poem. maybe if you changed it to "my soul sha'll be with you forever/ please dont let your heart hover." but other than that this is amazing :)