Would You Notice?

A poem I wrote last year for school. :] TO portray emotion and it is free verse.

If I were to die today,
There would be no witnesses.
Nobody would notice,
Nobody would care.
Lying here beneath this tree,
As its branches tower,
My feelings cower.
The wind whistles,
Making my hair toss,
And dance around,
My tear stained face.
While I leaned my cheek,
On its rough, lifeless bark,
I let myself think,
This tree,
Like a crab without its shell,
Nobody would care,
Nobody would notice,
There would be no witnesses,
If this tree were to die today.

Author's Note

Don't be too rough. It was done in less than an hour.

Reviews

[Sasha]

This isn't bad at all. Unless I'm getting this wrong, the poem's very sentimental. You went from being upset about how no one would notice your own death to being sad that no one would notice the death of the tree. I thought that was sweet and find myself thinking along those lines sometimes. Your imagery was good and I liked the repitition too. Nice job.