Sovereign Of My Soul

Sovereign of my soul and captain of my core,

she clutches me tight as I drift far from shore.

With diamond on cheek and rose against lip,  

I leave in her care this sinking ship.   

 

She takes into her, all that is me,

as I crumble and sink into this everlasting sea.     

Anchored within her heart, I breathe my last breath,

as I drift upon her Siren’s song, right into death.     

 

No one but she, shall dive down to find

any of the treasures that I have left behind.

For I am ghost of the sea, the phantom wreck,

with broken bones cast across the deck.   

 

I am wave and wind and sand and Sound,

I am Triton king who shall remain forever uncrowned.   

She is heart of the storm and soul of the sky,

Sentinel and savior to all those who must die. 

Reviews

[Cameron Berry]

This was a good piece. You captured the ship metaphor effectively, the flow was solid, and the rhyming was tasteful. Nice.

[samparks,sam]

Sovereign of my soul and captain of my core,
she clutches me tight as I drift far from shore.
With diamond on cheek and rose against lip,
I leave in her care this sinking ship.

She takes into her, all that is me,
as I crumble and sink into this everlasting sea.
Anchored within her heart, I breathe my last breath,
as I drift upon her Siren’s song, right into death.

No one but she, shall dive down to find
any of the treasures that I have left behind.
For I am ghost of the sea, the phantom wreck,
with broken bones cast across the deck.

I am wave and wind and sand and Sound,
I am Triton king who shall remain forever uncrowned.
She is heart of the storm and soul of the sky,
Sentinel and savior to all those who must die.

All word so nice. I like it

[Skai Rain]

I love the theme of love that keeps tying back to the sea. Do you know much of Greek mythology? This reminds me of the Goddess Aphrodite. A beautiful poem. Keep up the great work!

[Laurena]

Love how you have a reoccurring theme of the sea involved. The flow and content are beautiful. I really enjoyed reading this :)

[Mayank]

Love this mythic part... wondering how the story will be.

[R Smith]

where i live this would be a song to Aphrodite, its a love story to a beautiful maiden of the waves, at least that's what i see, it is an outstanding poem of immense beauty, thank you Tash :)

[NoelHC]

Very well rhymed, and laden with brilliant images. Really well done.

[Emily]

I love the meaning!
Well done!