Invisible

Of my Peter Pan series.

I thought you were him.

I thought you were my Peter Pan.

Oh how foolish I was,

To think that you could ever love me.

I trusted you.

I counted on you to be there,

But as I sit by the window waiting,

The time passes by slowly, with still no sign of you.

You really are a lost boy,

If you can’t see what’s in front of your eyes.

I’ve been here all along,

But you still don’t see me.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Wonderful use of words. I liked the feel of fairy tale and real life. Thank you Natasha for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Lucien Maier]

the pan, is the pan because he does not hold the weakness of needing someone.
The pan, is so sure of himself he has held off age.

But in the end. The Pan, is wrong.

[Natasha]

Very much agreed

[barleygirl]

I’m not familiar with Peter Pan so much, & I’m inclined to relate your multi-layered vignette as a message about everyday people. In the first two stanzas, I’m reminded of how many people bring expectations into every relationship. To me, this can be a spontaneity killer. Better to relax & be patient & see what each person has to bring naturally, instead of trying to get what we expect to get. The last stanza is especially powerful to me becuz of the way so many times people see what they want to see, not what’s really there (& this is connected to the “expectations” problem, too). The narrator of your poem is realizing these things, as if they are only happening with regards to the Peter Pan she’s addressing. But really, some of these discoveries are also brought about by the junk the narrator brings into this situation. Just my way of seeing such guilt-provoking messages, being a freedom lover born on independence day (July4) . . . Even tho I don’t see the world the way your narrator does, your writing is strong & original & thought-provoking. Well done! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Natasha]

Thank you, much appreciated

[Ghost]

Such a good write referencing it to "Peter Pan"... I hope the lost boy comes home to find you waiting for him... Thanks for sharing

[Natasha]

Thank you.