Forever Young

Of my Peter Pan series.

Pan, she wonders.

Such a mysterious boy,

Coming from a land of always dreaming.

Darling, he wonders.

Such a delirious girl,

Coming from a land of growing old.

Neverland, she whispers,

Where is that?

Second star to the right, he yells,

And straight on til’ morning!

But how do we get there, Peter?

Take me away!

Why, Wendy, we fly of course!

Take my hand!

Let’s fly to the land of never,

Where our worries won’t exist.

Stay here with me, Wendy,

And we can live forever young.

Reviews

[Abhishek Asthana]

so refreshing one... very thoughtful.. beautifully written... liked it a lot

[Natasha]

Thank you.

[bella]

I really like it. It's a deep twist on a classic light childrens' story

[Natasha]

Thank you!

[WoodenChair]

Diamonds are forever

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=t1TcDHrkQYg

[Rassoul]

We can live forever young.

Such an amazing poem, Natasha.

[Natasha]

Thank you so much

[SJ Mullins]

One of my favorite childhood stories. I always dreamed of being able to fly away with Peter to Neverland. A lovely vision of what might have been with Peter and Wendy, although I don't think Tinkerbell would approve. :) Nice ink!

[Natasha]

Thank you! I plan to write more with Tinkerbell included too.

[SJ Mullins]

Can't wait to read. You are most welcome! :)

[apennylate]

What a delightful, mysterious array of fantasy-based lines... I always wished for pixie-dust, myself... Lightly penned...

[Natasha]

Thank you!

[apennylate]

Welcome...

[Farhan Shaikh]

first time I'm reading about peter pan and the way you've written it looks fascinating

[Natasha]

Thank you!

[Tony Jordan]

I don't find anything new here other than a re-write of the movie/book dialogue, which to me lacks creativity. I'm not picking up what your laying down.

[Natasha]

Well if you really thought about the words, then you would see that they are crying out to each other, wanting the same thing, but she's afraid.

[Tony Jordan]

Wasn't that the case with the movie/book - wasn't the leaving behind of the 'real world' one of the subtexts?

[Natasha]

Yes, and so? All of my poems of Peter Pan have quotes/partial quotes from the movie/book. I just add my own to it. I haven't read or seen Peter Pan in awhile, though, so I am writing this from my point of view. Maybe this isn't my best poem, but I was trying to incorporate a specific quote in this and this is what I thought of. I am more of a story writer, but I like to see what I can do with poems.

[Tony Jordan]

yes and I thought so thank you.
I never commented on the 'quality' of this poem - we all are our own best/harshest critics.

[Gee]

Peter was a strange wee thing,
who flitted to and fro',
Wendy, bless her cotton socks
became his two bob ho !!!!

This is from the unpublished original version, honest

[Tony Jordan]

Now THAT was creative. From the under the counter version you mean Gee !! lmao

[Tony Jordan]

Tinkerbell
gave off a smell
she really was a sort
her take off lights
were bunged with s*ite
"ABORT! ABORT! ABORT!"

[Gee]

Yes my friend, the same place where butter and butty have absolutely nowt to do with bread....."excuse me son, pick that soap up ....."

[Gee]

LOL, so you've read it then

[Tony Jordan]

best aerodynamic soap for THAT carry on is Pope on a rope...the mitred helmet glides effortlessly, so I'm told *wink*

[Tony Jordan]

Great to see you again chappie. :)))

[Gee]

Yes father, where grease has nothing today with Olivia and John but Saturday night fever brought on by the thought of Sunday's after choir practice shenanigans...

[Gee]

You too. How's tricks on the Emerald Isle

[Tony Jordan]

haha - but Wow - you fired off a real old memory there - my da wouldn't let me read his copy of 'The Choirboys' but I commandeered it for ...ahem...'research' one night when he went t'pub. Class !!!

[Gee]

Good man......

[Tony Jordan]

I'm good mate but there's a profound sense of shock here after Manchester. :(
Book of condolences open in City Hall, heading down there in the morning to sign.

[Gee]

Terrible. Holly has been to see Bruno Mars recently with mum, makes me shudder.
Targeting kids is a new low, b******s, what next ?

[Tony Jordan]

Calculated to do exactly that mate...awful.

[Stacy Purvis]

I'm picking up what you're laying down about Peter Pan.
So, this is a series of thoughts?

[Natasha]

Sort of. They are crying out to each other. The first stanza is really thoughts, but then they are more conversing. But it's not just a conversation. She's crying out for him to take her away, but she's afraid and he's crying out for her to come with to live with him forever.

[Coyote Poetry]

You made the tale. Sweet and nice dear Natasha. I liked the flow of thoughts leading to hopeful ending. Would be good if we knew the happy endings in real life. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Natasha]

Very true, thank you!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Natasha.