One of my favorite childhood stories. I always dreamed of being able to fly away with Peter to Neverland. A lovely vision of what might have been with Peter and Wendy, although I don't think Tinkerbell would approve. :) Nice ink!
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7 Years Ago
Thank you! I plan to write more with Tinkerbell included too.
I don't find anything new here other than a re-write of the movie/book dialogue, which to me lacks creativity. I'm not picking up what your laying down.
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7 Years Ago
Well if you really thought about the words, then you would see that they are crying out to each othe.. read moreWell if you really thought about the words, then you would see that they are crying out to each other, wanting the same thing, but she's afraid.
7 Years Ago
Wasn't that the case with the movie/book - wasn't the leaving behind of the 'real world' one of the .. read moreWasn't that the case with the movie/book - wasn't the leaving behind of the 'real world' one of the subtexts?
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Yes, and so? All of my poems of Peter Pan have quotes/partial quotes from the movie/book. I just add.. read moreYes, and so? All of my poems of Peter Pan have quotes/partial quotes from the movie/book. I just add my own to it. I haven't read or seen Peter Pan in awhile, though, so I am writing this from my point of view. Maybe this isn't my best poem, but I was trying to incorporate a specific quote in this and this is what I thought of. I am more of a story writer, but I like to see what I can do with poems.
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yes and I thought so thank you.
I never commented on the 'quality' of this poem - we all are .. read moreyes and I thought so thank you.
I never commented on the 'quality' of this poem - we all are our own best/harshest critics.
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Peter was a strange wee thing,
who flitted to and fro',
Wendy, bless her cotton socks<.. read morePeter was a strange wee thing,
who flitted to and fro',
Wendy, bless her cotton socks
became his two bob ho !!!!
This is from the unpublished original version, honest
7 Years Ago
Now THAT was creative. From the under the counter version you mean Gee !! lmao
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Tinkerbell
gave off a smell
she really was a sort
her take off lights
w.. read moreTinkerbell
gave off a smell
she really was a sort
her take off lights
were bunged with s*ite
"ABORT! ABORT! ABORT!"
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Yes my friend, the same place where butter and butty have absolutely nowt to do with bread....."excu.. read moreYes my friend, the same place where butter and butty have absolutely nowt to do with bread....."excuse me son, pick that soap up ....."
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LOL, so you've read it then
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best aerodynamic soap for THAT carry on is Pope on a rope...the mitred helmet glides effortlessly, s.. read morebest aerodynamic soap for THAT carry on is Pope on a rope...the mitred helmet glides effortlessly, so I'm told *wink*
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Great to see you again chappie. :)))
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Yes father, where grease has nothing today with Olivia and John but Saturday night fever brought on .. read moreYes father, where grease has nothing today with Olivia and John but Saturday night fever brought on by the thought of Sunday's after choir practice shenanigans...
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You too. How's tricks on the Emerald Isle
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haha - but Wow - you fired off a real old memory there - my da wouldn't let me read his copy of 'The.. read morehaha - but Wow - you fired off a real old memory there - my da wouldn't let me read his copy of 'The Choirboys' but I commandeered it for ...ahem...'research' one night when he went t'pub. Class !!!
I'm good mate but there's a profound sense of shock here after Manchester. :(
Book of condole.. read moreI'm good mate but there's a profound sense of shock here after Manchester. :(
Book of condolences open in City Hall, heading down there in the morning to sign.
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Terrible. Holly has been to see Bruno Mars recently with mum, makes me shudder.
Targeting kid.. read moreTerrible. Holly has been to see Bruno Mars recently with mum, makes me shudder.
Targeting kids is a new low, b******s, what next ?
I'm picking up what you're laying down about Peter Pan.
So, this is a series of thoughts?
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Sort of. They are crying out to each other. The first stanza is really thoughts, but then they are m.. read moreSort of. They are crying out to each other. The first stanza is really thoughts, but then they are more conversing. But it's not just a conversation. She's crying out for him to take her away, but she's afraid and he's crying out for her to come with to live with him forever.
You made the tale. Sweet and nice dear Natasha. I liked the flow of thoughts leading to hopeful ending. Would be good if we knew the happy endings in real life. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
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