Intro to Maybe a Chapter

A Story by Tasha Gower

Stumbling and tripping over the entwined undergrowth, her sore and blistered feet seemed to have a mind of their own; somehow finding a way through the sodden earth and entangled roots. She could feel the dirt seeping through her trainers, weighing her down more with each desperate step. The boggy earth felt as if it was slowly engulfing her, enjoying and savouring every moment of torment it caused. The looming trees seemed never ending, no horizon in sight, no sunlight creeping through the dense leaves. Cold air pierced her lungs, every breath like shards of glass; the agonising pressure in her chest was too much for her fragile body to handle. Every muscle burning from over exertion, she could feel the weight of her body straining her weak legs with every movement. How long had she been running? Minutes? Hours? It felt more like days.

With every breath came unwavering fatigue, it felt like she had run a marathon, maybe she had. With no knowledge of where she was to begin with and no sense of time, she could be anywhere, or nowhere.

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© 2016 Tasha Gower

Author's Note

Any ideas in how to lengthen this? I'm stuck! Thank you :)

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Mayank

I like the beginning, it's very interesting and intriguing. I can say there is a plot. However, you ask how to lengthen this I suggest that you describe the character to the readers. The activity of the character is sure very interesting here but the Characterization may help to lengthen this intro plus reader will also be to draw character in their head.

Thank you.