Am i so alone??

Loneliness is the worst death

Its 3 am, I'm standing in the middle of the road,
Alone, helpless

My heart is crying out loud but no one's listening
Now I'm hopeless

Knuckles of my fingers are bleeding
being hardly bitten on the wall

But my tears dried up loosing a ton of it
regretting why am i so dull??

Slowly all the road lights turn on
And my eyes pissed off
nearly gone....

Shadow of my body is adjacent to the road now
I'm alone in the middle of the road, and no one's there to wonder how

Suddenly five racing cars comes at a speed
And crashes my body and doesn't look back like there's no need

Now I'm dead,
But still there's no one to at least take me to the grave bed

Author's Note

plz reviiew

Reviews

[jemaral]

The loneliness that this piece expresess is nothing short of mesmerizing... I cant help but feel the need to ease the empty feeling that echos from this poem.. from that i was moved to write this peice in response

I call out to her but she hears me not
Her crying heart drowns me out

She lashes out and strikes the wall
She is in pain and hears not my call

Tears on her cheeks leaving briny traces
Her spirit breaks denied embraces

Even as the darkness gives way to light
Still my presence elude her sight

Now brightly the light shines
I am swallowed by shadow lines

In the distance disaster comes at a speed
I reach out and pull and finally succeed

She cries as she can finally see my face
To her I say "Your side will be forever my place"

A poem that can inspire others is truly an extraordinary work... hats off to you my lady

[Tasfia Islam]

Thank you so much...... I should say ur piece of response is probably better than mine..... Awesome thought and response...... I think we should make this poem of two versions by Annabelle and Jemaral...... Then it will be great I guess.... And, I'm glad u liked it..... :)

[jemaral]

I would be honored

[Tasfia Islam]

me too....:)

[Fariha Tahseen Karim]

wow... its really sweet

[kitty blur]

The poem and the picture really worked well together. It was a sad story, you can't exactly portray happiness when you're filled to the brim with regret. The progression of this poem happened kind of abruptly - I didn't expect a happy ending, but I didn't expect death, either.;

If I may critique it: I'm unsure of the meanings of some of the phrases, like the wording in the third stanza. There are also a few grammar mistakes, like the spelling of 'losing' in the third stanza, the word 'comes' instead of 'come' in the seventh chunk, and possibly the word 'are' in between the words 'eyes' and 'pissed' in the fifth stanza. I am also curious as to what it is that you are regretting, like I really want to know the context of this poem. What happened to make you feel this way? My curiosity kills me.

Overall, thanks for the read. :)

[Shafqat Mushtaq]

its a curse to be a lonely figure ...
I draw this notion from your thought provoking poem. how wild can ones imagination go when alone, death is the limit ...
so don't let any one alone. always be there to hold their needy hand.

[Tasfia Islam]

Hmm... :) Thanks for the review..

[Jamestown]

So sad, feeling absolutely abandoned and alone, with nobody to help or care,
so many people have this unfortunately happen in life. Written so well, pic terrific.
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed

[Tasfia Islam]

Thank you, my pleasure... :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A very sad and lonely poem. To stand alone and face death. I like how you set-up the poem and the surprise ending. Thank you for sharing your excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Tasfia Islam]

Thank you.... :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[armin]

a really dark, sad and emotional write .Every word was on its place to leave an impact on readers mind.
Keep it up.

[Tasfia Islam]

Thank you... :) I would encourage u to read the 2nd version of this poem by jemaral namely, "By your side"

[armin]

ok i will.

[Lenah Mehzabin]

It will be always my favorite one.. the way every word described all those loners everyday .. simply amazing !

[Tasfia Islam]

Thank you... :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

i think you are trying to say that living like this is not any better than being dead.
well written....
dark poem!!
i liked it!!!
:)

[Tasfia Islam]

Yes exactly..... living alone with darkness and loneliness is so much pain.... It already damages the heart beat, and breathing harder than killing oneself.... And I'm glad that u liked it..... Thanks for the review.....:)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

you are welcome............!!! :) :)

[Emily]

'Its 3 am, I'm standing in the middle of the road'
I love how to tell us what time she was there!
It draws me right in!

[Tasfia Islam]

When i was writing the poem, the time was 3 am too..... And I thought, I could make the words enough strong to draw the readers into the poem..... And I'm happy that I did it.... :)

[Emily]

That's a cool story!

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

I like it, but the last two stanzas ar not necessary I think. It's already sad and dramatic what is happening without dying. Maiby it would be an idea to end with: Suddenly five racing cars cames at a speed...
Everyone knows what will happen. The suspence is bigger, the drama effect if you want to call it that way. But you are the writer and I'm just a reader with some ideas.

[Tasfia Islam]

No,,, I must say your idea is also great..... :) And I'm glad u liked it..... :)

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

My pleasure, Annabelle. Have a good day.