The perfect you

I love your everything starting from ur greatest perfections till ur perfect imperfections.....

Since when i was little kid
You were the prince in my dreams

You would wear a prince dress
And me in a complete mess

But still u told that i looked pretty
And kissed me as your hello kitty

Your face was blurred but now its clear
I wish I could get u near

You would sing for me in the rhythmic guitar
As the teardrops fell in eye's flutter...

Those tears are the result of extreme happiness
And the promise that u made to flew away my sadness

Then u gave the most wonderful smile
And i ran towards u from a far mile...

And u kissed my wet eyes
As the tears fluently dries

I never thought that it would be so real
You helped my heart wounds to heal

And now I know the reason I love you
Is because its the perfect you....

Reviews

[Su' Nacnetaf]

Poignant and inocent, gave me the sensation of hearing the thoughts of someone who's been in love for years and still holds on, stronger than in the beginning, to that caring feeling, grateful and loveful. thanks for sharing.

[Zakari Schmidt]

Beautiful poem Annabelle I think it's great, full of honesty

[Tasfia Islam]

Thank you... :)

[Eleanor]

Beautifully written :) I love the way your words kind of dance on the screen.
Great job :)

[Tasfia Islam]

:) Thank you....

[Sanjh]

It's beautiful Annabelle, I love the way it flows. Excellent selection of words.
thank you for sharing...:)

[Tasfia Islam]

Thank you.... my pleasure... :)

[DoormanDan]

Beautiful poem(as usual). I loved the words, imagery and rhyming you implemented into this. The word fluently is a fantastic word. This is the love poem to end all love poems!

[Tasfia Islam]

Awwwwww..... Thank you so much.... :)

[Emily]

Nice wording!
Keep it up!

[Tasfia Islam]

Thank you.... :)

[Tasfia Islam]

This one is certainly filled with emotion and her reaching out, recapturing... I do have a suggestion... In this phrase...

You would sing for me in the rhythmic guitar
And teardrops ran out of my eyes in liter..

The word liter brings to the reader's mind.. trash thrown around.. also there is a large contrast between the sweet melody of his music and then trash..would you consider something like
You would sing for me in the rhythmic guitar
As the teardrops fell from the eye's flutter? or something similar that keeps the flow and sweetness of the music...

In this one which I love:
And u kissed my wet eyes
And the tears fluently dries try replacing the AND with As in the second line...

I never thought that it would be so real
You helped my heart wounds to heai (I think a typo) did you mean heal? instead of heai

And now I know the reason I love you
Is because its the perfect you.... (Love this finish... but perhaps (Is because of the perfection in you)

I loved feeling the emotions that created this.. Very nice job indeed.... I am in hopes that my suggestions do not offend you, they were meant that way at all...

[Tasfia Islam]

Never.... It can never offend.....In fact, I loved it... your suggestions are absolutely great..... I think I should and I will follow ur corrections.....And yes, it was a typo in the 2nd last stanza.... It will be heal. And the last line, Is because its the perfect you,,,, I wrote this to match with the title of the poem and create a connection.... :) And , I'm glad u liked it..... Thank you very very very much for the review . I'm one of ur fans.... :)

[Nitesh Mahabal]

Dreams or rather say expectations. Well potrayed

[Tasfia Islam]

Expectations.... :) Anyways, thanks....:)

[Isaiah Jacob Barber]

lovey expression of love. nice poem

[Tasfia Islam]

Thank you.... :)

[Kuldeep desai]

good really aprecciable....

[Tasfia Islam]

Thank you..... :)