Relapse

The voice spoke

It whispered my feelings

The dithering changes of moods

The sudden relapse

The shuddering of a body, lying over shards of glass

They engrave your skin

They ram their hands through your chest and pinch your heart.   

Why should anyone suffer?

Why should a soul made of tender, azure particles

experience such gloom?

 

I sat on my knees in a narrow road that extended forever

Dressed in my black Jewish coat.

 I saw the wings of death, slashing the air

The mountains, and the trees; they slashed all of life.

 

At my sight, death stopped.

It lowered its wings and smiled.

“Rise to your feet,” It told me.

I never rose to my feet; I remained there on the road

Death kneeled down, kissed me on the head and asked me not to worry.

 

How kind death can be? It caresses your bare soul and fills it with hope.

It fills it with hope for a better world, where man unites for all eternity with the essence of love and immortality,

 

Reviews

[Christy Sargent]

You write beautifully my friend. Your expressions here are very clear and very touching. Thank you for writing. Christy

[Ladysue]

This is powerful. Some good images. it flows beautiful...nicely done..

[SilentLullabies]

Beautifully written. I stayed captivated through the entire poem.

[Shiningwolf]

Very powerful words.

[OT]

oh yes! a powerful write here - I love some of the images - " I saw the wings of death, slashing the air" - brilliant!

[emmajoy]

Powerful, dramatic, reminds me of a William Blake picture .. you draw goodness from the some time horror of death, take it into its real meaning of passing into a better world. It's the mourners who hurt most.

[Khaaki]

Birth is an accident, death is not... Death has many perceptions, here you have presented us with the bright side of death too... wonderful tariq

[Quinn Blackburn]

a gentle soul weary upon the road, this piece has threads of sadness running through it like a melody you just can't get out of your head. not many see Death as kind, I appreciate that thought. Excellnt wordcrafting, well done!

[patricia]

I thought this one was of a high standard, some memorable lines thankyou

[kuru]

quite haunting...you gave death an angelic persona...something different...a different outlook great words