Eyes

This piece from one of my screenplay roles that I written , love this piece a lot just want to share it.

"Every so often souls come out and play taken hearts and souls away just wonder why the devil never want me come out and play, yes I've been kick out so many times out of his kingdom last track after 8,989 that they leave millions of chains on the front door without any reason, been there last time didn't went so well wonder why they have greed, jealousy and hate in their crib for someone like me always come to f**k their plans, had my fun with them just watching each other rip out their hearts out and take their souls just for game, set fire to the Devil's wife bed while she's sleeping in it never knew why she would want to call the Lord's name when she's in her kingdom, turn their ever so beloved members against them both just for the fun of it, destroy eight realms that they work so hard to win, yes they try to pin monster like me that they can't tame, take out my heart but see couldn't hold it, try to send needles through my veins just steal it, that didn't work as they plain, yes a breed like me that the devil himself doesn't want or need, others say they have seen one like me before with eyes just as evil as mine, but there's only one that can rule my kingdom. They will have to find a new home and workers too, many will try their best but will fall like the rest, never be fool just by looking at the eyes for I am far more cruel then the rest, Love being me and the eyes that have and taken souls don't freak just doing what I am created to do, so don't scream like a fools hate when they do the screaming thing"

-Tanya S.

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[Cpt. Alex Rover]

This sounds like a really epic monologue, but for readability's sake, shouldn't there be a bit more punctuations?