A small boy .
A Poem by
Taniska 😊😊
A small boy was enjoying his life .
I met a small boy.
Cycling with a joy.
Moving on his dreamland.
Using some funny words.
I met a small boy.
Cycling with a joy.
Trying to defeat me.
without any shy.
I met a small boy.
Cycling with a joy.
© 2018 Taniska 😊😊
Reviews
Wanted to rewright a comment that should not have been, your story is as wonderful as it is awe inspiring
Posted 5 Years Ago
To see children totally absorbed in what they are doing is a delight. Whether cycling, trampolining, roller skating, it doesn't matter. What does is that they are happy. Having fun. Cute poem.. Chris
Posted 5 Years Ago
To see children totally absorbed in what they are doing is a delight. Whether cycling, trampolining, roller skating, it doesn't matter. What does is that they are happy. Having fun. Cute poem.. Chris
5 Years Ago
Thanks Mam for reading my poem (smiles) 😊😊😊😄.
Very sweet. Even the smallest moments of life can have an impact. Keep up the great work!
-Derekv
Posted 5 Years Ago
Very sweet. Even the smallest moments of life can have an impact. Keep up the great work!
-Derekv
5 Years Ago
Thanx for reading sir . (Smiles) 😊😊😊😄😄
A sweet poem that made me smile.
Posted 5 Years Ago
A sweet poem that made me smile.
5 Years Ago
Thanks Dawn for reading my poem. 😊.
OH NO. you got trolled too. This needs to stop. Not your fine work but their comments and storys
Posted 5 Years Ago
OH NO. you got trolled too. This needs to stop. Not your fine work but their comments and storys
5 Years Ago
You also got trolled by him .
5 Years Ago
yep. He even wrote me a story
this boy seems like a nice boy. you evey become freinds with this boy.
Posted 5 Years Ago
this boy seems like a nice boy. you evey become freinds with this boy.
5 Years Ago
Hmm but he was very smaller than me and I had never seen him again . Thanx for reading.
Your story is a good beginning, but it leaves me wanting more. I love what you have included so far. I love the playful, interested way you look at life & the people around you. Even tho your English has a bit of an awkward sound in spots ("boy trying to defeat me in cycling" -- "defeat" used in unusual way . . . maybe "race" would be better?) . . . overall, your writing is not unclear & it doesn't need to be changed to "hear you" writing the way you speak, a little bit of broken English, but very understandable. As a way to expand your story, remember to bring in all the senses . . . what does this cool boy look like? what does he smell like? what does he sound like? Is he singing? humming? Find ways to spark the senses as you SHOW instead of tell (first rule of good writing) Fondly, Margie
Posted 5 Years Ago
Your story is a good beginning, but it leaves me wanting more. I love what you have included so far. I love the playful, interested way you look at life & the people around you. Even tho your English has a bit of an awkward sound in spots ("boy trying to defeat me in cycling" -- "defeat" used in unusual way . . . maybe "race" would be better?) . . . overall, your writing is not unclear & it doesn't need to be changed to "hear you" writing the way you speak, a little bit of broken English, but very understandable. As a way to expand your story, remember to bring in all the senses . . . what does this cool boy look like? what does he smell like? what does he sound like? Is he singing? humming? Find ways to spark the senses as you SHOW instead of tell (first rule of good writing) Fondly, Margie
5 Years Ago
Thanx mam I will try to improve my English and my writing .
When I was in 11th I met this type of girl
Posted 5 Years Ago
When I was in 11th I met this type of girl
5 Years Ago
Really ! Har bar jo mere sath hota hei vesa tumhare sath hi kiyu hota hei .
5 Years Ago
Mujhe to roj cool cool girls multi h 😂😂😂
That boy was really cool .
Posted 6 Years Ago
That boy was really cool .
5 Years Ago
(Jeff) Ohhhh. it was a real boy? must be pinocio cus this trash is full of lies
5 Years Ago
What do you mean
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Added on September 9, 2018
Last Updated on September 21, 2018
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Taniska 😊😊 Cuttack, Odisha, India
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I am a girl of 16 and I'm here to share my writings with you and also to accept your good suggestion. 😊
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