My Serenity

My first Tanka poem. The beautiful photo was taken by the very talented Ken Simm -- thanks, Ken! http://www.redbubble.com/people/kenart/art/797548-1-solitude

My serenity:

twilight walk, deserted beach,

troubled thoughts adrift;

all worries are left behind

with my footprints in the sand.

 

Author's Note

This is my first Tanka poem, and from what I've read, with the Tanka form of poetry, the syllable count should be: 5/7/5/7/7 and should be about nature, the seasons, and/or strong emotion.

Reviews

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

A wonderful Tanka, never tried one before but then I get stuck on the count thing.lol
A great piece Tania, the thought of leaving your troubles behind like footprints in the sand.

[Lea Jane]

That is incredibly beautiful! Isn't it funny how you can say so much in such few words? Great piece, Tania! :]

[Legion]

I found this breathtakingly beautiful. I think the use of the font that you chose really set the mood with it also. A short, captivating piece at its finest. Any more and I think it would have ruined it or, at the least, made it not as perfect. Bravo!

[BlakeL79]

A very pretty poem, I certainly enjoyed the read. Thank you for sharing.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Tanka is a beautiful form of writing .. this one is lovely.. has a good feeling leaves me feeling calm.. for a first this is great.
Chloe
xoxo

[Karen]

Writing haiku is more difficult than simply word count, though there are many who believe they can write it and ignore the other rules (I was one of them). Your tanka is a wonderful rendition of the poem and the images so lively.

[Fran Marie]

This is great in form and content~ Tania ~ you have penned a beautiful Tanka for your first attempt at the form~Well DonE! I say~Fran

[Phil Sanders]

Well whatever style .. it is beautifully written ....

[Amor-de-angel]

Beautifully done. Not tried a Tanka yet. Wonderful write

[Shadows of Sight]

With the moonlight to guide us, the noise of the fresh surf rolling in and out, and the sand at our feet! What a wonderful releasing poem! I could feel the moment and the refreshing of energy that comes from it!
Wonderful words Tania! Great Job! :)