My Serenity

My first Tanka poem. The beautiful photo was taken by the very talented Ken Simm -- thanks, Ken! http://www.redbubble.com/people/kenart/art/797548-1-solitude

My serenity:

twilight walk, deserted beach,

troubled thoughts adrift;

all worries are left behind

with my footprints in the sand.

 

Author's Note

This is my first Tanka poem, and from what I've read, with the Tanka form of poetry, the syllable count should be: 5/7/5/7/7 and should be about nature, the seasons, and/or strong emotion.

Reviews

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

A wonderful Tanka, never tried one before but then I get stuck on the count thing.lol
A great piece Tania, the thought of leaving your troubles behind like footprints in the sand.

[Celtic Cat]

Lovely!! Very serene and soothing. Great job!

[kurrupted]

Believe me i dont know anything about this form of poetry but one thing i sure do know is this piece is great!
indeed nature is an excellent dispeller of worries...Yes the night when the whole world sleeps, the beach, the sand, alone, truly its a perfect time and spot to reflect and calm down; it sure does work.
thank you for the author's note also, its really educating.

[Stan]

I likes it. Sand, beach, soothing. Aaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhh

[Robert A. Pacheco]

Wow. This was really cool. Just forget all of your problems, and feel at peace.

I love it.

-Rob-

[Lorna Lee]

Tanka Tania- I enjoyed this....

Sorry, couldn't resist. I really do like it... we both have always enjoyed the beach as a way to escape. You sure have a gift for "coloring within the lines" so to speak... it's a perfect Tanka!

[Rodwonder]

I need to go to the beach... As always there is something in the words to take with you through the day. The shore is a great place to cleanse the thoughts!

[ELii]

Very beautiful. I have walked the beach many of nights letting trickles of worry escape me. Nice job.
ELii

[Kara Emily Krantz]

for a firsta Tanka poem this is greattt.... lol i'm not goign to lie i hadn't heard of Tanka til now!! but you make it good! lol big hugs

[Dani California]

all worries are left behind

with my footprints in the sand.


I really like this. As we all know, footprints in the sand are washed away forever....
Very nice write Tania and great job for your first Tanka! I've never attempted one... perhaps I will soon :)

[Imperfection]

I love reading and writing Tanka's and this is one of the best ones I've come across on the WC.

I like the picture that you've drawn with your words. You've stuck to the format and at the same time expressed yourself beautifully.