Going Crazy

I wrote this cheery little ditty last fall but never posted it

They sedate me,

then berate me;

you can’t convince me

they don’t hate me.

 

You don’t trust me,

you disgust me;

you don’t love me,

only lust me.

 

They lie to me,

you cry to me

and say that you

would die for me.

 

Well here’s your chance

to give me

the one thing that would

impress me,

 

because I don’t want

to be me,

and I want to take you

with me.

 

They say that I am

going crazy --

feel like going

for a ride?

 

Author's Note

This falls under the category of "I have no clue what my muse was" :-)
I think I wrote it before the "Asylum" poems, so it may have been the muse for those...

The changes in tempo were intentional.

Reviews

[BelieveInCelia]

This shouts uncontrollable helplessness at the hands of 'others'...
I have not read your other poems, however, this makes me reflect on many other ways people feel the same sense of helplessness..without escape....
Old Age...the elderly...being trapped in a body so very old and incapable of doing what his 'mind', so vital and youthful still, is screaming for it to do; yet the reality of being held captive in the shell he now occupies is a journey to insanity in one way...there is not escape...until death...
or
diseases that take the mind, like Alzheimer's...
I am sorry...I am too sad to continue this discussion....
Your writing has gripped my heart ever so deeply...I am being crushed as I write this...that is what poetry is supposed to do...reach and connect to the reader....
Well, you certainly have....
I pray your future writing reveals a hint that you have found or glimpsed into the sunlight again and have touched beauty in all its innocence, and it has in return embraced you in its arms.
Celia

[Lorna Lee]

I am not sure where this came from either Sis, but I like it. It flows very smoothly and definitely takes on the tone of a madman (or woman). You have such a gift for giving your work a life of it's own, no matter what the subject matter is. Great Job! Thanks for sharing it.

[*** Hey Jude***]

I am so glad you posted this impressive piece! Its something that touches a deep feeling of being able to relate to the exact feelings you describe. The format works perfectly with the beat. I adore the whole piece, especially the conclusion. ~ Jude

[Mark Pearce]

It's got some real flow, but I loose it in stanzas four and five.

The concluding line is nice. Breaking from the rhyming pattern strikes me as okay there, as it is the concluding thought.

[Candle in the wind]

It coincides with my mood at present. I loved it. I want to break away from over rated sanity

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

You created a fash flowing piece, the more I read the quicker I went.lol
A great piece...wonderfully written!

[Legion]

Crazy. Liked it. Very straight forward. Good write.

[Stan]

Well, a lot of things favored are just superficial, yet those who find substance in something real, going against the grain, others look at them and see them as different. Thus, it's easy to call them crazy because it makes it easier for them if something they don't understand has a label.

[Y.F.]

This is a fast pacing song with a great flow.
It starts off as sort of a rant, and evolves into the subject resolution, which definitely falls under our society's label of "crazy".
This poem definitely achieved it's goal - great work!

[Nicholas Hallows]

I like the fast rhythm of this - especially of the first three stanzas. To me, the repetition of 'me' emphasises how when certain insanity takes a hold we can become self-obsessed and lost in ourselves. Well done. NH

[Ken Simm.]

Don't usually enjoy rap but this feels like a smooth one and I enjoy this.