These Tears

These Tears

A Poem by Tania Leigh
"

My first Senryu for a contest....

"

 

These tears in my eyes

are all for you, my sweet love.

Take them and be gone.

© 2008 Tania Leigh


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Beautiful. Your writing reminds me of water for some reason, I don't know if it's the font you use, the words, style, probably a combination of them all, but in a way it reminds me of sparkling streams of water. A very powerful image. This is pretty, I look forward to writing more.

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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A wonderful piece. I don't know if the contests been and gone but good luck!


Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very short and to the point.

Wouldn't it be nice if we could rid ourselves of our tears so easily. Ascribe them to the one who caused them and then be done with both at the same time. :)


Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love it!
Sandra

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Congratulations on placing in the Senryu contest! Vicious poetry, this. Sorry, I can't add criticism. It's perfect.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Short, sweet, and beautiful. I love it! Great job. :]

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very short but poignant. Sometimes a simple statement is all you really need to convey much emotion and you have done so here beautifully.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sweet simple and to the point.... but not really sweet lol.... I love this piece it's very powerful! Great job!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You've managed to capture and express a lot of different emotions here -- in a few short sentences. Wow. Beautiful.

It has me a bit captivated I might add - perhaps still trapped in my own rendition.

Awesome write. :)

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I don't know what to say about it. My mind kept wandering around as I'm reading it, I mean, I've read it five times already and it kept reminding me of someone else...

Anyway, it's all good here...


Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Much kudos to you. I'm rubbish at writing senryus. Yours has captured a point well and, in my opinion, is what a short piece should be like - one that keeps you reading again and again to make sure you have picked up the essence of what is in the writers mind. Hope this does well in the contest.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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4/7/08 When my "Phobia" contest is completed April 18th, and winners have been chosen and notified, I'll be leaving the cafe indefinitely to focus on my family, as well as my first book and website. .. more..

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