Beautiful. Your writing reminds me of water for some reason, I don't know if it's the font you use, the words, style, probably a combination of them all, but in a way it reminds me of sparkling streams of water. A very powerful image. This is pretty, I look forward to writing more.
Wouldn't it be nice if we could rid ourselves of our tears so easily. Ascribe them to the one who caused them and then be done with both at the same time. :)
I don't know what to say about it. My mind kept wandering around as I'm reading it, I mean, I've read it five times already and it kept reminding me of someone else...
Much kudos to you. I'm rubbish at writing senryus. Yours has captured a point well and, in my opinion, is what a short piece should be like - one that keeps you reading again and again to make sure you have picked up the essence of what is in the writers mind. Hope this does well in the contest.
4/7/08
When my "Phobia" contest is completed April 18th, and winners have been chosen and notified, I'll be leaving the cafe indefinitely to focus on my family, as well as my first book and website. .. more..