Beautiful. Your writing reminds me of water for some reason, I don't know if it's the font you use, the words, style, probably a combination of them all, but in a way it reminds me of sparkling streams of water. A very powerful image. This is pretty, I look forward to writing more.
This is a beautiful, touching piece and then adding the fact that it's haiku format just makes it splendid for me, personally. It's such a hard thing to get across everything you want to say in such short verse. Great great job and thank you for submitting to the True Talent contest.
My dear friend, you educate me in some many ways - if it hadn't been for you I wouldn't know what's a Senryu. In my humble opinion this poem is perfection. You portray a world of meaning in just three short lines. Amazing!
Damn it girl you can write - but we already knew that. For a first Senryu it is perfect -- for any Senryu it is perfect. For a small poem that tells a complete story it is perfect.
4/7/08
When my "Phobia" contest is completed April 18th, and winners have been chosen and notified, I'll be leaving the cafe indefinitely to focus on my family, as well as my first book and website. .. more..