Fall Into Gray

 

My heart is made of ruby red glass and adorned by sapphire scars. I keep it safely locked in its crystal case upon a pedestal of cascading colours; it is the only brilliance within a vast gray sea of emotions…

 

Then along comes your love; a tiny steel hammer, forged of hurt and anger and swung by pride as I watch helplessly…

 

I am ruefully in awe of the irony in the beautiful tinkling sound that I

hear when the crystal case is conquered and tiny shards of ruby red glass

explode ...and fall into gray.

Author's Note

A challenge by my good friend Nuala Molloy Moran to use the word "pedestal"

Reviews

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

A nice piece, reminded me of beauty and the beast where the rose is in the glass case slowly loosing it's petals. A wonderful write!

[A.J. Smith]

Very nice work, Tania...I enjoyed reading this. You are so wonderful with words, my future poet laureate.

[Phil Sanders]

A challenge that you rose to superbly ... lovely write ....

[Wolfwind Words]

What a wonderous creation from the need to use just one word!
The images were fantastic even though it went from beauty to the fall into gray.
Good write.

[Nicholas Hallows]

Good use of the word 'pedestal' and also 'tinkling'.
'adorned by sapphire scars' - that has a really nice rhythm to it.
Nice.
NH

[None]

Perfect title! It's "ruby red glass," and it's important since your heart is made of glass here. You have to keep it safe. I can invision a beautiful piece of art in my mind that you have created with your outstanding words And your ..."adorned by sapphire scars" shows the gems have left beautiful indentations that will never leave. Your poetic masterpiece unfolds and has me in awe. The "tiny hammer" and the "tinkling" have me imagining what takes place--I can't look---the pain is too great. Ahhhh!!!!.... I'm putting your precious poem on a pedastal in my favorites (in a glass box, of course!) for safe keeping.

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Wow. This poem is amazing and it's going straight into my favorites. :) Awesome write!!!

Heather

[Rhiannon Dragonraine]

I think you have done a very good job at this and have explained heartache beautifully. This is a wonderful peice and yor sensory descriptions are amazing- there are times I am very jealous of you I must admit as it seems creativity just flows through your viens whereas I struggle with blocks left and right trying to get my life to clam down and allow me the focus to write. Wondeful work my dear.

[Amor-de-angel]

You did the challenge well. I love the refernece to the sapphires and rubies. Great work

[Laughing Lunatic]

Well I would say challenge won =) I love anything that sparkles you had me ruby red glass and adornded by sapphire scars ,very beautiful work =)

[The Viking]

This poem creates an interesting kind of synesthesia. My mind quickly conjures images of sapphires and hearts shaped out of cut rubies and diamonds. Good use of symbolism - how your heart is a jewel and the antagonist in question's love is metaphor to a hammer shattering that beautiful jewel of a heart. Pretty rocking.