Abandon

 

Luminous light adorns the horizon as Dawn  

lends her warmth to the storm-ravaged sea.

 

Tempestuous waves of the fore-night, now tame,

roll their way to the shore, then in silence recede.

 

I stand alone with bare feet in the sand and seek

comfort from the cold ocean water’s caress.

 

By turns, my troubles I cast to the surf and then

pray that this time they, too, will regress.

 

The salt of my skin meets the cool ocean spray;

they unite as warm tears stream down my face.

 

I walk away quickly, leaving behind sorrow and

my memories for the sea to erase.

Reviews

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

A wonderful image you paint, my fav lines are -

I stand alone with bare feet in the sand and seek
comfort from the cold ocean water's careses

Wonderful!!!

[Phil Sanders]

Utterly beautiful ... wonderful word imagery ....

[rash]

wow, the salt of your skin and the ocean breeze, beautiful concept. Absolutely moving in the harmony of all interconnected life and the love that hosts it. I am truely impressed. Your piece is a very pretty poem.

[Tamme]

What a wonderfully cleansing thought... Love the imagery. Wish I had my feet in the sand right now instead of all this snow.

[SweetPeachesAlways]

A perfect place to toss your troubles...
How poignant, how elegant...how very beautiful! Nice flow, nice imagery, truly beautiful...
Good job.

[Baby Boy]

First off,the title is just perfect for your words that you have painted! Secondly, it made mefeel as if I were actually on a beach. The vision is awesome! But thirdly, I really can feel this! I can feel this person's emotions and that's what I love about this peice! Great write Tania! Every word was moving! :)


-JC-

[Alex Walters]

Amazing writing.
I can imagine this like a scene from a movie. Brilliant use of imagery.

[desertraven]

I agree Capt. beautiful imagery!
Sandra

[Melanie Jane Boicourt S..]

Very well written. I love the title too. To abandon your sorrows for the sea to absorb, if it were only that easy.
Beautiful imagery.
Love All,Mejasha

[kurrupted]

deeply insightful,i love this piece...like oliver twist i ask for more lol

[Rhiannon Dragonraine]

Wow this is very empowering and magical I really like the emotion put into this as well as the feeling of relief that is found at the end! Wonderful work!