Abandon

 

Luminous light adorns the horizon as Dawn  

lends her warmth to the storm-ravaged sea.

 

Tempestuous waves of the fore-night, now tame,

roll their way to the shore, then in silence recede.

 

I stand alone with bare feet in the sand and seek

comfort from the cold ocean water’s caress.

 

By turns, my troubles I cast to the surf and then

pray that this time they, too, will regress.

 

The salt of my skin meets the cool ocean spray;

they unite as warm tears stream down my face.

 

I walk away quickly, leaving behind sorrow and

my memories for the sea to erase.

Reviews

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

A wonderful image you paint, my fav lines are -

I stand alone with bare feet in the sand and seek
comfort from the cold ocean water's careses

Wonderful!!!

[pal]

deep emotions.. well knit with words.. leaves a soft tender soul behind..

pal

[Steven Williams]

Speechless.... I really felt the emotion in this piece and I love the last two lines.... I love the metaphor of erosion you used to describe the erasure of sorrow and memories...

~Stephen

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Great poem. This makes me long to check the surf report! Surf and die!

-Gabe

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Very beautifully written. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[AK]

But imagine how glorious dawn on the mountaintop will feel...
Beautiful piece, this!

[Candle in the wind]

You make me long for a walk along the sea shore as I long for the waves that can caress my anxieties away.It would be so great to be able to cast away the tumult within to the raging waters.The poem is so evocative and i can hear the roaring waves and feel the sand against my feet and the waves lapping against the shore.

[The Viking]

Mournfully beautiful. The rhyme flows smoothly with the words and images. I can see a girl standing sullen on a lonely beach side under a gray morning sky. A very powerful image. I also like how the "Ocean Water's Caress" though violent and enraged earlier now has redeeming purposes. The catharsis at the end closed the poem perfectly.

[Joseph - Michael]

It sure is so nice and simple, yet it's well written. I really do admire your writings, because of the way you have them set up...

All is still good here...

[Jaffa Forbes]

very simple but powerful imagery. well done
jaff

[Shelly Wiseberg]

Excellent write! Emotional, heartfelt, and you feel something when you read this poem. When it touches the heart string you know its good! Shelly