Tempest

The weather inside is frightful

 

Rain drops falling rhythmically wash away my salty tears,

and gusts of wind graciously conceal my desperate cries.

Booming thunder drawing near forestalls my many fears as

lightning lifts away my pain then tears through troubled skies.

Darkness cloaks my worries and banishes them to the night,

but they will find their way to me before the break of dawn.

If the comfort I seek from the storm feels so safe and right,

why does the tempest within me feel perilously wrong?

Reviews

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

I liked this piece, I loved the questioning at the end. A great write!!!

[Kara Emily Krantz]

"If the comfort I seek from the storm feels so safe and right,"

nice piece. i like how you intertwined the emotions and the tumultous weather. :)

ver well done

,3kara

[Steven Williams]

I love the rhythm and rhyme scheme. Beautiful imagery and I thank you for sharing it with me.

~Stephen

[pal]

A very nice piece of poem..
comparing natures in varasity n emotions in human..

pal

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

This is such a beautiful peace, has great rhythm to it; almost a chorus to it, awesome --mishel

[Amy]

AMAZING!!!!!!

[Jaffa Forbes]

very nice write. has the feeling of a storm as you read it too.
good stuff
jaff

[Snow White Queen]

I love this.

[thecoolone52]

yeahh you leave the reader hanging kind of in the end....... it was like a romantic nature problem kind of write..... very good i enjoyed it!!!!

[Static C]

Storms form an Imagery we can all feel a connection to. The problem is that in using this Imagery one can often fall into the trap of becoming cliche`. You've avoided this nicely hear because of the power of the imagery used. I think the line concerning Lightning was the best part. For me you have to include a way to Illuminate when using any type of dark imagery, otherwise you miss real understanding of the darkness. It is a truism that all things have an opposite, and that you must be aware of the opposite of anything you wish to understand. The Truth Is A Reflection In The Mirror Of Deception.

[Baby Boy]

You got skillz gurl! Wow! I love this peice and the way you can switch up and write different styles! Great job Miss Tania! I love saying your name! LOL! I love your writing! One luv sweetie! :)