Tempest

The weather inside is frightful

 

Rain drops falling rhythmically wash away my salty tears,

and gusts of wind graciously conceal my desperate cries.

Booming thunder drawing near forestalls my many fears as

lightning lifts away my pain then tears through troubled skies.

Darkness cloaks my worries and banishes them to the night,

but they will find their way to me before the break of dawn.

If the comfort I seek from the storm feels so safe and right,

why does the tempest within me feel perilously wrong?

Reviews

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

I liked this piece, I loved the questioning at the end. A great write!!!

[Kaden Sylvers]

hauntingly beautiful. good use of description and imagery.

[James Watts]

I love the wording of this. Very,very nice. excellent write.

[Brette Medb]

Sometimes the storms within us can be more frightening than the storms without because there is no place to run and hide from them. Another great write,


Brette

[James Mayfield]

Emotions storm within us all yet most never question their validity. Another nice piece.

[Nicholas Hallows]

You capture the tempestuous weather inside really well here. The words definitely contains the energy of a storm. Congratulations on the contest. NH

[PianoandPage]

i really dig the ending on this although the last line left me on a bit of a downer.

i connect with storms in a big way so all of your metaphors and images struck me as powerful and vivid. great job showing how the elements come together to mirror your internal storm.

love it and congrats on 3rd place!

[Lea Jane]

Wow, I don't know what else to say except that it was soo beautiful! Another fantastic write by Tania Leigh :]

[~*The Writer In Me*~]

Great job on this poem.

[Lorna Lee]

What a moving piece. You can actually feel the emotional turmoil. I love it!!

[~crazy Beautiful~]

I find thunderstorms relaxing, i loved the visuals.
the play off of emotion and the fury of weather were a good combination.
Nice work
Thank you for entering my contest