The Raven's Path

 

As I close my weary eyes I see a raven in the dead oak tree

 that marks the end of this fateful path -- and my life –

 but I manage a laugh, for as its cold

 black eyes watch over me in

 grotesque anticipation of

 my very last breath,  it

is I who will win in

 the end, you see;

it is I who chose

 not the path on the left.

 Death was right and Life was left.

Author's Note

This poem was inspired by the accompanying photo and E.A.P.

Reviews

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Ooooo! I like the darkness and intrigue of this work. Which way to go? Life? Death? Is there really much fo a difference? To a very large degree, I think that it is all one and the same.

I think that this poem helped to inspire me to write some darker work, although I am going to go downright sinister.

"grotesque anticipation of
my very last breath, it
is I who will win in
the end, you see;
it is I who chose
the path on the left."

I really like that passage - choose your destiny!

Wonderful poem! Good inspiration for your contest.

-Gabe

[Legion]

Interesting piece. Love the way it ended with the play on words. Good work.

[Keith]

and rebirth, independence forthwith was procurred....

it is so unfortunate when the only path left is righteous, and untrodden...



enjoyed thoroughly

[A.J. Smith]

Tania, while I'll continue to be impressed, nevermore will I be surprised at your unbounded creativity, seemingly infinite wellspring of inspiration and ideas. Nevermore. Of course, the first thing that struck me was your interesting visual formatting, very eye-catching. I especially like your phrase, "...for as its cold black eyes watch over me in grotesque anticipation of my very last breath." This piece feels very much like a Poe write. You're bold, but with confidence well-founded to take on such a write and emerge with a winner. I can't help but wonder if the spirit EAP has already read your words here and is smiling, warmed--or perhaps chilled.

[bluessadmood]

very wise twisting of words ,truely artistic ,almost near my way of thinking when i write i congratulate you ,though you are happy as if you are winning,my view is we are always losers

[Laughing Lunatic]

This is a fantastic write. I love it! =)

[Gary H]

Wonderfully woven idea to shape the poem so the reader gets the feeling the path is only destined for one way - at the end leaving the revelation of the both possibilties. Also looks like a tree of life/death.
What I think would make EAP happy is the mention of the raven. Fits perfectly. Great work.

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Ooh wow, this poem is fantastic. I really like this, awesome write!!!

Heather