The Deal

You inadvertently sold me your soul,

and a deal is a deal, so here is your gold.

Go see to your family then return to me,

for I am your master, you're no longer free.

 

Sweet, foolish child, with so much to learn;

your family is safe, but you may well burn

Are they worth it to you? Your certain demise

is frightening you now, I can tell by your eyes.

 

Your sweet innocence is intriguing to me

and I find your resolve amusing, you see.

Play your cards right and I may keep you here

to learn, by my side, all I hold dear.

 

You must know this now: tears have no effect

on a being like me, as I don't feel regret,

and I don't feel remorse or doubt or pain

and I can see through any emotions you feign.

 

Be a good student, and I'll teach you well

this dreaded abyss, what you know of as Hell.

You'll learn to rule fire and change your look;

the things that you know of only from books.

 

You'll then recruit new souls, people like you.

Frantic for something, what it takes they will do.

Whether driven by hunger or pain or pure greed,

they're convinced that you have just what they need.

 

You will witness how quickly our numbers increase,

because many are willing to sell out to the beast.

Humans are weakening as the pace becomes faster

and they buy one-way tickets to impending disaster.

 

Big houses, big cars, living large has a price.

Need something done? They'll invent a device.

They work all their lives away just to obtain

things that, in the end, cause them the most pain.

 

It's not in their nature to go in reverse;

the need for perfection is their greatest curse.

To fail or seem weak is their ultimate fear,

and those very things are what brings them here. 

 

There now, my child, go do what you need to

There's plenty of time for me to teach you.

Eternity, I believe, if I may be so precise;

I'll see you quite soon, to begin your new life.

 

Before you go, Sweet, let me ask you one thing,

and ponder it well when its gifts that you bring

to your family, to save them and where they dwell

were their luxuries really worth you living in hell?

Reviews

[Sir Jake]

Hmmm, I really enjoyed the bittersweetness of this piece. I like the idea of a deal with the devil, but this is so much more, and sometimes, sacrificing for those we love is worth it, but then, sometimes we have to step back and realize that material wealth isn't always the most important. Great job on this.

*Jake*

[James K. Blaylock]

Wow, I loved this piece. It reminded me of a really good horror flick. Although, where I used to live we had a guy working for us -we owned a remodeling company-; and he told us that he sold his soul for riches and fame. He had them too, if only for a short while... then the devil took it all back. So he stated. And every night he dreamed of the hell to come. He was a scary guy lol.

[Amor-de-angel]

Nice write Tania, flowed well.
Good work

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Wow! This is excellent Tania, everything about it. From the first line you just can't stop reading it. It's captivating. It's perfectly formed too. An outstanding achievement. I very much enjoyed it.

[None]

Tania, Your precisely written poem had a hold on me from start to finish. This tells quite an entertaining story. An incredible poem packed with immeasurable nuggets of wisdom. Such an extensive imagination you have! That's it, your poem is going straight to....no, not hell----to my favorite's library!

[Deborah Shepard]

Many blessings , sorrows but all can find somethimng I adored it

[Jason]

A good write about the atrocities that come with materialistic happiness. Very, very good.

[Charlotte Rose]

This was very well written.. A great write!!!

[SM Davis]

Before you go, Sweet, let me ask you one thing,and ponder it well when its gifts that you bringto your family, to save them and where they dwellwere their luxuries really worth you living in hell?

So YOU'RE THE ONE I need to pay a visit to??!! LOL THIS WAS GREAT! LOVED IT..hit a bit close to home.