Castle Walls

I've one thing to say
before my crusade:
your reign is over,
relinquish your throne.

 

It escaped your attention
while you were so busy
ruling your kingdom
and admiring your crown

 

That I'm my own person,
not one of your minions;
I am equal to you --
why can't you accept that?

 

When did it happen
that you became jaded
and hid from the world
behind castle walls?

 

You're not the same person
that I gave my heart to ;
I'm taking it back now
to protect it from harm.

 

I'll leave you with warning;
you'd be wise to heed it:
there's a new Queen in town
and when I reign, it pours.

Reviews

[Crystal]

THis is a great write. I really enjoyed the read.

[Celtic Cat]

wow...... this is fantastic!!! I love it to pieces, what a great poetic cry of triumph! Love that last line, it sums it up so devinely. This is pure talent shining through. Excellent, excellent, excellent!!!

[Paula M. Potter]

I really enjoyed reading this and your words paint a very powerful picture.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A very good write. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Alex Walters]

It personally sounds to me like a metaphor for a relationship gone bad... If that is the case then I found this poem relates to me really well, Not knowing what happened and why the other has changed. If that's not the case... Then i'm probably sounding really stupid right now :]

[Jaclyn]

I love the double meaning of "when I reign, it pours". Very cool.

[Beth]

fantastic! I love the covert revenge cycle going on here... great job with expression and clarity.

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

Take that Crown!!! Great job!! This was a great poem! Hope your kingdom turns out good... :) Great write! it had a wonderful flow...

[Aaron J. Wald]

hmmm... Temper temper. Just please, don't kill anyone. It sounds like you're on the verge of doing so. I like it, it has a very nice flow. I usually like anger poems too...

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Ooh, wow. I really love this awesome poem. Fabulous write!!!

Heather