It all ends like this

Poem I wrote while I am in a bad place...

 

Eyes down

Head up

Tears held back

 

Brave face

Weak soul

Broken heart

 

Hide it all

Ignore it all

Its still there

 

Locked away

In my heart

Forever there

 

Rising to the surface

Never forgetting

Always there

 

Unbearable pain

Merciless foes

Beat me down

 

Tears let lose

Run down my face

Given free reign

 

Heart stops beating

No more love

No more sorrow

 

It all ends

 

Author's Note

Please comment!

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of words and I could the anger and the confusion.
"Heart stops beating
No more love
No more sorrow"
Some ending allow us to suffer then we rise up wiser and stronger. Thank you for the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Sophie]

I really liked this! You are a wonderful poet! I don't know why but on the last line my brain added "tomorrow" without noticing lolol. This was soooooo good!

[realmwriter]

And we all die. I love the pace it work swell for the piece. Very well written, Line for line a fantastic write...!

[Desmund Tiny]

short but it has a big impact to the readers.

[patricia]

A dramatic and courageous effort to mask inner sadness, stiff upper lip kind of thing, but expressing the loss of feeling in one who is forced to function at this level. Thankyou.

[Kenneth The Poet]

Dark stuff. I like this short, punchy stuff.

[Shy Girl]

Drowning is what comes to my mind here. There was a small break in the surface in the middle there, but the waves broke upon you once more, dragging you under again. Yep, sounds like drowning to me. Darkness really can feel that way. You explained it very uniquely above. Again, look for, ironically enough, the light house sitting on the bluff, and swim with all your might. It'll become closer and closer. Then that break of the surface you tapped into will hold stronger. Very insightful poem to your true self doubts just beneath, holding you there. :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I think that when we are brought into the darkest part of ourselves, we lose the ability to see beyond the pain... blinded by the things that eat away at our souls, until it just becomes unhealthy to stay in the dark.... I hope that everyone could be so lucky as to have an outlet, to release the demons within. Great job!

[Lily Mae]

It made me think of how it would feel to lose all your blood and be left and cold empty shell.. A very painful and intense write. Excellent ..x

[KAREN]

Sad and really full of heartache. The poem flowed with emotion!