Heartbreak and Sublty

Was I really that subtle that you didnt know

Was it not as obvious, it didnt show

My hearts pounding fast as it wants to cry out

My minds spinning and I just want to scream and shout

I know you couldnt always be mine forever

There is no such saying as better late than never

Tears in my eyes as I know you must go

Sometimes I wish you would just know

Everytime i'm with you I always seem to smile

Everytime you go to leave I wish you would stay awhile

You make me laugh when all I want to do is cry

And now the saddest part is telling you goodbye

By now I know that I am too late

I should have never made you wait

But I guess that some things are not meant to last

All I can do now is try to remember the past

As long as you are happy its okay if you go

In this case its better that you didn't know

My heart and my soul always belonged to you

Even if you thought i was always looking right through you

Reviews

[RedInk524]

You are killing me with how well your sad love poems describe me. seriously, WHAT.. THE.. F**K!? :D
Of all the poems of yours i said related to me on a personal level, this one takes the cake. This is exactly how i felt and what i wanted to say to my ex when she left me for the last time. Its like this poem foretold the breakup 4 months before it happened. Kinda creepy... :D
I love that you almost always rhyme, it always makes a poem more enjoyable to read. Have you tried writing a sonnet? Definetly one of my favorites of yours, you are one of the most melancholic (and best) romantics whose work i read.

[RedInk524]

Sad, well structured, and has an enjoyable rhyme. I like the emotion and how it reaches out. I like your style of writing.

[Arietta]

It's amazing, so much emotion, I love it. Haha, you're such a great writer! With amazing emotion, and the rhyming wasn't the silly kind! It gave it rhythm, and it gave me chills :D

[Crow]

A truly rhythmic piece with imagery of loss, a light portrayal of realization, and regret.

I found it wondrous.

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haha when i first got this read request i was like who's Serenity but then i saw it was you by your profile pic and i was like oooooooooh! then i read your poem and i smiled and the beauty and sadness of a lost love even if i have no idea what it is i have seen movies. :P good job!