Stranger

Talking to the stranger within!

Stranger

From the moment of birth
To the bitter instant of death
Stranger soul aching for one more breath
…
Beyond the years
Behind the rusty emptiness
Between the present and your memories
Stranger you're dwelling within the darkness

Your dragon awakes

Breathing fire into your veins
Burning rage lost within your devils
"My demons unleashed"
"Into flames mercy died"
"I will give them a reason to bleed"

Beyond the years
Behind the rusty emptiness
Between the present and your memories
Stranger you're dwelling within the darkness

On your knees
This ground blood it feeds
But is it yours or your enemies?
"Let me tell you a thing or two"
"Looking through my window"
"I watched as the monsters grew"

Beyond the years
Behind the rusty emptiness
Between the present and your memories
Stranger you're dwelling within the darkness

"The light is fading into dark"
"Flip open the twins ready to attack"
"Backed up with a wall behind my back"

Stranger…
You stood here once before
Wondering where you went wrong
Facing a faceless army ready for war
Forever into battle is that truly where you belong?

Author's Note

This I just wrote, I don't know it feels strange maybe the end isn't my usual close and that reason, or maybe its just me I don't know, anyway I hope you enjoy it

All the best,
Tamer Qtaish

Reviews

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Wow.. lots of emotions pouring through this.. with your inner demon or dark side symbolized as the dragon for rage pouring into your veins.. a sense of a born fighter.. fighting oneself perhaps as much as through life itself. Most question their goals, life, inner-being.. self-acceptance can be hard.

I can relate to the wondering where one went wrong in life.. more than once pondering purpose and meaning in life.. and so much more. This was really great.. and gave an open look to a self-reflection of battle with oneself and/or roots.. great creative job!

[shadadakiya]

sound's like the devil you speak of that is how he has done me all my life ever seense i got saved he's been after me and even before very great work and so true

[Irfan Shah]

Beautiful. Reminds me of how lonely we could be... when one is a stranger to one's own self is what could be termed as the worst kind of loneliness. The way the evil side of that stranger was portrayed was done exquisitly :

{''Your dragon awakes
Breathing fire into your veins
Burning rage lost within your devils
"My demons unleashed"
"Into flames mercy died"
"I will give them a reason to bleed" }

Well done mate!

[Asha Raphael]

i told you before i'm telling you again; just perfect!

[J. Marc]

Written with quite some insight!

Indeed, who does not know the feeling of estrangement to a place, a situation, one own's feelings, to others��.. A very common feeling dealt here very cleverly, showing the absurd of the human condition sometimes, and the need to have something else beyond all these, for otherwise, then the battle between the inner feelings and the others inevitably takes a physical turn!

At the end of the poem, I also like the very strong sense of inner strength of the author. The courage to face the situation even if it is a repetitive one, to face the future no matter what, and hence to give a very wonderful message of hope. Not an illusory hope, but a confidence in oneself and in one's own actions because no matter what, one is always a�stranger.

The ending shows hence a very virile sense of self determination as well as an eternal proof of inner peace: fear disappears not because the situation is not dangerous but because the man is connected to his inner strength and knows that he will overcome it and survive!

Symbolic and brilliant!

[Dark Daughters]

Another good piece, an observation that even in birth and death, throughout life, we are all still strangers

[Bubo]

The stranger within, can be frightening, the questions we ask ourselves, this was a very good, strong write, with a deep underlying sadness.
Beyond the years
Behind the rusty emptiness
Between the present and your memories
Stranger you're dwelling within the darkness

"The light is fading into dark"
"Flip open the twins ready to attack"
"Backed up with a wall behind my back"

You have great self expression.

[Jeannine Saadeh]

i see this is ur latest work and i like it. ur right, the ending is a little different from how u usually end it, but its a great twist! and good use of quotes and words, again, another great poem

keep on writing tam-u know ur good at it :)
J

[John Stussy]

I like how it turned out man, powerful from beginning to the finish. It makes me look at the stranger within myself, cross-examine and question my being. Great song, I really enjoy your style Tamer.

[Courtknee]

Amazing

[Nico]

outstanding bro......the whole piece is great including the change in your typical endings!!!!!