One spirit too many (The System must fall)

One spirit too many

With all this distortion
Sending signals into the skies
Underneath this corruption
Crying eyes as lady freedom dies

Standing alone and confused
I feel the bitter end cutting like the wind
Once betrayed, compressed and over used
I've opened my eyes and they won't be closed
…
No more fading lines
No more of these lies
No more foolish signs

You might think I am just one soul
But there are many more
Rising flags the system must fall
Brothers and sisters lets prepare for war
One spirit too many they can't control

In the land of everlasting night
A burning spark turns into light
Lost spirits charge up for the fight
Holding hope they call us out of sight

You might think I am just one soul
But there are many more
Rising flags the system must fall
Brothers and sisters lets prepare for war
One spirit too many they can't control

In the land of dying dreams
A thought turns into whispers
Broken souls stand up like soldiers
Proud wearing our colors they call us drifters

You might think I am just one soul
But there are many more… So many more
Rising flags the system must fall
Brothers and sisters lets prepare for war
One spirit too many they can't control
One spirit too many they can't control
One spirit too many, the system must fall
… The system must fall

Author's Note

I am still working on it, none the less I hope you enjoy it,
All the best,
Tamer Qtaish

Reviews

[Celtic Cat]

I'm not so much a war mongrel but they are often confused with freedom fighters....which I'd like to be. One man's "terrorist" is another mans "freedom fighter". I like that you point out you are not the only soul. Sometimes I feel like I'm fighting a battle all on my own...but in fact, many people are tired of the system. Revolution and anarchy are most likely not about to come crumbling down around my neck of the woods....but it probably wouldn't hurt much if it did. Lady Freedom seems to be stuck in ICU (Intensive Care Unit)... and if we don't keep a close eye out...someone may sneak in and pull the plug. I like this thought-provoking piece....and I agree that the biggest systems in place are the most flawed. Good write.

[Jade]

wht im still wondering is, how do u stay so unique with each poem and song? seriously, theyre each so different and wonderful in thei rown way and this is no exception. i like it a lott....very nice

[Mountain Dawn]

For someone that doesn't think they are a real writer...I've read alot of pieces here and this is one of the best. Great flow, feeling...
Wonderful work. I will be reading more of your writings soon!

[ShadowDance]

Wait... Wait!
I never read this one, its new?
Yes it is I bet, I will better guess here, your not talking polotics here! you still talking about tradition and things like these cause of your own problem? am I right?

Well you did it in an abstract way which you dont usually do, nice, not your best I must admit!
And yes I think too it might need more work!

[Jeannine Saadeh]

the end rhymes r so creative..good work,love the poem overall

[jenny]

ya i agree with the others, this is really good..

[JC Fox]

I agree with the chap below about anarchy, another great work

[A.r. Bazian]

Anarchy for life man!
Anarchy is Order!
Salutes!
true... enthusiastic... and touching!

long live rock n' roll

[Jeannine Saadeh]

i like this poem a lot, u had the image of war and rebellion in my mind as i read the part of "brothers, sisters, lets prepare for war" and i like the fact that u used words that ryhme at the end, the meaning stood out more..lovely work