Seventy miles II

 

Seventy miles II

 

<Starts fast with no music>

One two three

You think you're free

Four five six

Don’t you try any tricks

Seven eight nine

You’ve crossed the line…

 

<Music kicks in>

Baby you don’t want me anymore

This is a sign of peace not a sign of war

Chewed me up and spit me through the door

 

So hear my song

… My song tonight

I got the devil on my left

No more angels on my right

…

I always heard what you said

Seventy miles and I was dead

 

With trouble behind my back

An endless sunset on my track

I took my past threw it in a sack

 

So hear my song

… My song tonight

I got the devil on my left

No more angels on my right

…

I always heard what you said

Seventy miles and I was dead

 

Cold white between the teeth

With burning tires underneath

A lonely flame I start to breathe

 

So hear my song

… My song tonight

I got the devil on my left

No more angels on my right

…

I always heard what you said

Seventy miles and I was dead

 

This road has no stops

Fueled with fuel that never ends

A pack of my best lonely friends

 

One two three

You think you're free

Four five six

Don’t you try any tricks

Seven eight nine

You’ve crossed the line…

<Stops>

Author's Note

This is a rewrite of an old one for sure, but the it was only rewritten when the feelings resurfaced again, the pain of breakups and sometimes telling your mind so you can move on wont be a bad idea!

Reviews

[ShadowDance]

Where is part one! I demand part one! Lol
Ok I admit although write later and on a bit different story this one is better, but the old one isn't bad either man, post all your stuff, how many are they by now 300 or so, well put another 10 or so, come on! Don't hold out, that's being selfish, which your not bro I am just teasing you� Love it like everything but that one you know which one I am talking about, that one is a great writing I just don't want that end for you nor for your angel

[jenny]

this is really cool, and i wanna hear this one! nice...

[Jeannine Saadeh]

love the rhyme and rhythm u have in this poem!, and i can "feel" the poem as i speak it. i also liked the way u used the numbers in the beginning...good use of words