Her Eyes

Her Eyes

Ensnared in a web

Of dark lashes was

Her eyes,

 

Bold and brilliant,

Mesmerizing, dazzling

Her eyes

Like pools

Of liquid gold.

 

Her eyes,

Hypnotizing.

 

Her eyes,

Electrifying.

 

Her eyes,

A beacon of hope

In a sick,

Twisted world

Her eyes

Daring to do

Things they thought

She never could.

 

Author's Note

This was a poem that just came to me after finishing my essay. Please feel free to offer any advice you'd like to share. It's the only way I'm going to get better. Thank you for reading!!:):)

Reviews

[mercy party]

very good, the near rhymes made it unpredictable, it stayed on point and topic. it flowed. I want to know more about this twisted world and what this bad-a*s can do!!

[Tamara]

Aw, thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it! Were there any issues with the writing? Feel free to say:)

[mercy party]

no issues with the writing itself. I just thought you could tell us more. Leaving the audience wanting more is key. I think you could open up and really create some awesome characterization .

[mercy party]

so maybe the only knock ( in a constructive sense) is maybe its vague.

[Tamara]

Thank you for reading! And for the advice. It really helped, thank you:)

[mercy party]

you are welcome! keep at it!

[Tamara]

Thank you,again. And you too! I really enjoyed your poem. The strong use of malice,etc. to show your character's hate for the person was just incredible. Such powerful feelings were expressed and I felt as though I really connected with your poem.:)