Worth The Wait

You murmured sweet words of love to me,

Though my heart was one to hesitate,

Praying this time I’d be able to see,

Hoping against hope you were my fate.

Incarcerated in yourself the perfect gentleman,

Silently wishing I could hope your hand,

Trying my best to believe in you,

Wondering if your heart is really true.

Scared to trust not only you, but me

Afraid to let you in my heart,

Not wanting to be torn apart,

For that I’ve gone and lost the key.

I know it may seem like I don’t care,

Or at times that I’m not there,

But that’s not who I am inside,

Personally I just have a lot to hide.

I’m hoping that I've caught your eye,

That your affections stays on target,

When I speak I hardly lie,

I’m not one you’re soon to forget.

Can you pick up my shattered heart?

Accept me from the that start?

I’m hoping that its not too late,

I love you I hope that was worth the wait.

Reviews

[Stefanie Holmes]

"Silently wishing I could hope your hand," I believe the word 'hope' in this line is supposed to be 'hold'
"I love you I hope that was worth the wait." You either need a period after 'I love you' or a semi-colon if you want to keep it as a full sentence. Your other error was pointed out in the other review.
Other than those easy fixes I enjoyed the poem. You wrote it beautifully from the heart. :)

~Stefanie

[Natalia]

Thank you Stefanie. :)

[Jackson H. Harley]

Another good poem, nicely written with some great lines that really put the point across :) I can't help but agree with Elly_Green (hope you don't mind use of username/review) with regards to the rhyming scheme, unless you were going for an experimental edge :p that being said this is still a great piece :)

[Elly_Green]

Just a note... your rhyming scheme should 1) not exist, 2) not be forced, 3) be consistent! I love the sentiment you were trying to convey and the imagery of your poem. However, I got sidetracked by lines that rhymed, which ones didn't, etc. Also, unless the grammatical errors are on purpose, I would suggest a quick moment to edit - 6th stanza, "Accept me from the that start?" Your fourth stanza is beautiful and powerful. Keep on writing, you got a good place to start. Welcome!

[Natalia]

Thank you.