AfterDeath- The Fang Brothers Chapter Teaser

A little teaser for a chapter I'm doing in my book after death. Brothers separated by death meet once again.

The Fang Brothers-Teaser
Tallon:…Vengence? That goal you so desperately seek..well..lets just say that you'll find yourself conserved in more crimson than you asked for. Now..I could go on for countless hours on how pointless your goal truly is. But knowing you, I'm fairly certain you took your time and thought this through before making your decision final. However, one thing your forgetting brother... is that your hatred and your desire to take vengeance upon those who have plagued you with this hate. It doesn't end, I'm afraid.

Alek: Make your point..

Tallon: Revenge is like a wildfire, Alek. Once you find yourself lost in the seemingly endless forest of flames. No matter how desperately you try to extinguish the fire..more fire will continue to rise from the burning wood. And some flames will rise even higher than before.

Alek:…

Tallon: In other words, the more blood you spill to satisfy that rage that has stirred up inside of you. You will soon find that your hunger will be insatiable, and then eventually…you will realize that no matter how many times you think you have reached your goal. The distance of you and your goal will be even further out of your reach than the heavens that loom over us.

Alek: How interesting, you have a very good point. Perhaps I should just put down my goal for vengeance. But you see, I just can't overlook one thing. It's the fact that some stranger who knows nothing of the suffering I endured, has the audacity to give me some over recycled philosophy lecture.

Tallon:…

Alek: And to add insult to injury, that stranger also has the nerve to imitate my dead brother?

Tallon: Alek

Alek: Save it!

Tallon:…

Alek: I get it, I see this little game your playing here.

Tallon:…

Alek: First you pretend to be my brother, and then you want to try to convince me that revenge isn't a reasonable goal. You want to know what I think? I think you have something to do with my brothers death. Knowing what I'm capable of doing and the determination I have to take revenge for my brothers murder. I find that it's only likely that your one of the people responsible.

Tallon: I understand fully why you find this absolutely impossible to believe. But I can not stress this enough Alek..it's the truth. I really am your brother.

Alek: You know what? Don't even bother wasting your breath. Do you honestly think that I'm that gullible?

Tallon: As much as you want to accuse me of deceiving you. My word still stands and it always will. I am and will always be no matter how much you want to deny it..I am your bother. The same brother that died that day..

Alek: Hmph, I figured it out now..

Tallon:…What?

Alek: First, let me ask you Tallon. Or at least that's what you keep calling yourself. Are you scared?

Tallon: Huh?..um..well no..

Alek: heheheheh…(the grin immediately fades into a blank expression. With a menacing glare, Alek stares at Tallon.)……….you should be…

TO BE CONTINUED

Author's Note

It's still a work in progress so keep that in mind if you notice any errors.

Reviews

[matrixmark]

A work in progress you say....

The piece is well structured and too behonest I didn't find any spelling errors and I found that your grammar skills were really good. Sentence length was good, you kept it compact and punchy. Always a pleasure to read a piece when it flows and a clunky sentence doesn't slow it down.
Screenplays are not my forte BUT having said that, I can see that when you start do develop further on this piece, it has the potentinal to really shine.

Good work, I enjoyed the read.

Mark.