chapter 7 - The journy continues (draft)

So I made my way across the hall, her gaze never leaving my sight as I made wet footprints on the very white carpet.

 'Mom isn't' going to be happy about this', I thought to myself.

But then again I think she wouldn't even notice that and pay more attention to the girl that gives Wednesday Adams a run for her money, or whatever devil kids trade now days.

'YOU!'… I heard her behind me, which made me walk just a little bit faster. That didn't help much because she materialized right in front of me which made me lose my footing and slip on the carpet. I tried to get a hold of my footing and take off like a rocket out of there, but just before I made any sudden moves she lifted me off the ground single handedly by my shirt and pushed me forcefully onto the wall of the hall so hard that one of the pictures on it fell off.

She cornered me on the wall with no way to escape, grabbing me by the shirt practically half a foot off the ground, and I could feel the air beneath my bare feet.

"I have proved to you time and time again what I am capable of, what else do you want!",she said through gritted teeth, her eyes boring into mine with such intensity it was like a fire was blazing within them.

"I'm...Ahh…" I stuttered, not knowing what to door think more like it. My mind was racing with thought and emotions, confusion came most times but then realization hit me.

'You can read thoughts' I said is a gasp of air.

Her expressions changed into its icy domineer and she loosened her grip on my shirt causing me to fall on the ground.

'Took you long enough', she said coldly as she stepped away from me, and then stood, leaning on the opposite wall looking at me as I managed to get up.

 

Reviews

[MR_BERG]

This better not be all of it! Finish it please!

[Alex Luna]

Basically the same with what i had said on the intro. I like the plot (might e tightned up) but the sentence structure a bit off, I like it nevertheless.

[Domenic Luciani]

It needs more explanation of the events that are happening (speaking of the book as a whole) like what Randy's overall thoughts on the situation of time stuff and the random super-human chick that keeps popping up. I think he would be a bit more questioning.
I also think Randy could use some more characterization as well.

[Steve]

"I have proved to you time and time again what I am capable of, what else do you want"

These two thoughts should be two sentences.