Broken Heart

How someone feels when they get left behind, especially a girl.

You left me.

I don't know where are you.

You left a note:

"You are as beautiful as a butterfly,

But am sorry my love

We can't be together.

Because I can't love you

As you want me to."

My heart is broken,

Like a shattered mirror

On the floor.

In thousand pieces.

No-one can put it together.

No-one can dare to pick it up.

No-one can fill it with love.

No-one can take place in that

Broken heart.

But...

You could put it together.

You could dare pick it up.

You could fill it with love.

You could take place in that.

However, you aren't here.

You can't do any of that.

My heart is broken.

And it will stay like that.

For my whole life.

It will get a designation of

Broken heart.

Author's Note

Please do tell me how is this one..
This is first sad poem I wrote (I guess).
Enjoy!!

Reviews

[The dark story]

so beautiful and nice and heart touching...........i really liked the second stanza.the comparison of the broken heart to the broken mirror is just so sublime and great.the diction you have used is pretty nice too......but something is wrong in the fifth line of the first stanza,revise it.anyway.great work my friend....

[Anonymous Girl]

Oh I did that on purpose to make it look like a conversation :)
Thanks for the review :)

[The dark story]

it's my pleasure!!!1

[Lehlohonolo Lichaba]

bravo sad but beautiful

[Anonymous Girl]

Thank you :)

[Cerise]

i loved it for the detailed manner you have tried to tell...it feels like a story. its got a very nice flow. a Lil more practice and u shall be good..but for a first try its really good..

[Anonymous Girl]

Thank you :)

[Felicity's Eve]

This is beautiful! It's sad, but very touching and your words flow into one another in a graceful way. :)
For your 1st sad poem, this is fantastic!
Good luck and God bless!

[Junert]

It's well written.

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This is exactly how my friend feels *starts crying* You've done a sad but touching poem! *picks a tissue and wipes her tears* 100/100 I loved it!

[Anonymous Girl]

Thank you :)

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you're welcome! :)