Broken Heart

How someone feels when they get left behind, especially a girl.

You left me.

I don't know where are you.

You left a note:

"You are as beautiful as a butterfly,

But am sorry my love

We can't be together.

Because I can't love you

As you want me to."

My heart is broken,

Like a shattered mirror

On the floor.

In thousand pieces.

No-one can put it together.

No-one can dare to pick it up.

No-one can fill it with love.

No-one can take place in that

Broken heart.

But...

You could put it together.

You could dare pick it up.

You could fill it with love.

You could take place in that.

However, you aren't here.

You can't do any of that.

My heart is broken.

And it will stay like that.

For my whole life.

It will get a designation of

Broken heart.

Author's Note

Please do tell me how is this one..
This is first sad poem I wrote (I guess).
Enjoy!!

Reviews

[The dark story]

so beautiful and nice and heart touching...........i really liked the second stanza.the comparison of the broken heart to the broken mirror is just so sublime and great.the diction you have used is pretty nice too......but something is wrong in the fifth line of the first stanza,revise it.anyway.great work my friend....

[Anonymous Girl]

Oh I did that on purpose to make it look like a conversation :)
Thanks for the review :)

[The dark story]

it's my pleasure!!!1

[Adreamer's Bluejay]

I know this feeling exactly. only Butterfly was replaced with a dreamers metaphor. You definitely captured this feel, but I do think the two stanzas of nothing but repetition were a little much or could have been worded a little differently, because as they are now, they just kinda make the piece feel like its dragging on.

[Anonymous Girl]

Ah okay, I will edit it as soon as i can. Thanks for pointing out and suggesting :)
And thanks for commenting ^^

[Saddam]

My heart is broken.
And it will stay like that.
For my whole life.
SOOOOOO beautiful and very loveful too, this one is like never forgetable. Very nice.

[Anonymous Girl]

Thank you so much :)

[ron]

I felt the same way on more than on ocasion. Its hard to pick your self up after something like that. Very nicely writen.

[Anonymous Girl]

Thank you :)

[Rhianne Ney]

It was beautifully written at the least, so you don't have to worry, *thumbs-up*

At least, you're not writing anything so depressing so it's really great ^-^

100/100

[Anonymous Girl]

Lol thanks :)

[Rhianne Ney]

You're welcome

[Horizon K.]

Very lovely in a sad sad way:(. This is so easy to relate to, for anyone who has had their heart shattered by another, that hopeless feeling and futile wishes he would change his mind.... Well penned

[Anonymous Girl]

Thank you. I appreciated it

[Flutterby aish]

it's really touching......n d comparison wid d broken mirror is smthing dat really got me!!!!nice one!!!

[Anonymous Girl]

Thanks :)

[Flutterby aish]

welcome!! :)

[Anonymous Girl]

:)

[Methu]

So sad !!!! but everyone's heart is not the same. people can't stay broken :( they look for another love!!:( try to fix a broken glass but they dont realize that glass was already broken and u can still the crack life long!!!

[Anonymous Girl]

Thanks for reviewing

[Castonovia]

Awwww, soooooo sad, the shards scattered aimlessly from a broken mirror, a reminder that love can be broken and hearts scattered to the wind... very emotional ;)

[Anonymous Girl]

Thanks.. I don't where does this stuff comes from.. I justw write it down when it suddenly appears out of nowhere.. :p
Thanks again!! :)

[Castonovia]

No problem, keep doing what you're doing ;p

[Anonymous Girl]

I will and you too :)

[Lost Howls]

Its a very surreal setting, quiet and sad almost as if you can hear the mirror breaking that is your heart.

[Anonymous Girl]

Thank you :)

[Yheela]

Very bautiful and sad, love can be both a blessing and a curse.

[Anonymous Girl]

Ture. Thanks :)