Well this is my first writing..this article is based on the reality of life.after seeing the youth being mislead i thought it was important to refresh their soul and guide them towards a content life
The Reality of Life
As a child is born he is innocent and angelic. He repeats
what you say and follows what you do. His sweet little acts are a source of joy
for the whole family. This is undoubtedly the most cheerful stage of life. As
he grows up he learns a lot of things, while most of them are productive others
aren’t. He is shown a lot of paths in front of him and has to decide which one
to follow. He follows one, then another and quickly realizes that his life is
not going in the right direction. This is not what he always wanted to do. He
gets depressed and hopeless. He spends most of his life in this misery. Things
get very tough for him. He doesn’t know where to go, who to look up to. It is
only when he gets old that he realizes the true meaning of life. Perhaps it was
the innocence, the purity that was missing throughout his adulthood. He indulged
into things which were materialistic, virtual and unrighteous. This is the
reason why one goes back into his childhood as he gets old. But by that time it
is too late. If only he could go back in time and undo his wrong deeds. Thus it is
necessary that we start giving
importance to the basic principles of life and stay away from the worldly
desires so that we won’t have to contrite for our deeds when we get old and
feeble.
Please ignore any grammar mistakes. The Target of this article is the youth,it would be highly appreciable if you rate and review this article and also let me know of the shortcomings as it is my first writing.
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Hi Talal, I think you are a natural, you write brilliantly and I could not detect any grammatical errors. Keep writing, this is a solid effort, I thoroughly engaged with your perceptions of this young boy's development and your philosophical stance was mature and enhanced the piece greatly, Well done.
Yes. I appreciate your point about the Child getting waylaid and disiilusioned with Life. You can elaborate on your very effective deliberation some more. Add more emotions and more imagery poerhaps. But the idea is solid. It has inspired me to write about a beautiful baby girl who was very gifted but was ignored for an ordinary and plain little brother. After 4 decades...She is still struggling to realize her talent today! :)
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you so much really appreciate your suggestions :-)
A perfect description of American society as it stands. Emphasis on the wrong things, loss of values. Short, sweet, and to the point. I like it. Well done, and kudoos on your wisdom, courage, and observation.
V
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
thank you so much...i hope the youth gets the message :-)
A lot of wisdom was put behind this piece. I agree with it in the sense of the struggles we face as we grow up and the mistakes and choices we make will forever influence us in life. I thought it had a fantastic message and I am impressed with the philosophical background you put into it. Well done with this!
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
thank you so much really appreciate your comments :-)
He indulged into things which were materialistic, virtual and unrighteous. This is the reason why one goes back into his childhood as he gets old. But by that time it is too late. If only he could go back in time and undo his wrong deeds. Thus it is necessary that we start giving importance to the basic principles of life and stay away from the worldly desires so that we won’t have to contrite for our deeds when we get old and feeble.
There's a lot of wisdom in your work. Very nicely done :)
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
thank you so much...really happy you liked it :-)
11 Years Ago
You're welcome it was fantastic looking forward to reading more :)
this is brilliantly written but more importantly its amazingly thought about and philosophical... i completely agree with everything which is said in this and even though i know this is an inevitable path for alot of people still dont quite know how to prevent it from ever happening to me...
a very good piece... well done
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
thanks for your review...i hope people get the message :-)
You have so much truth in your writing and I completely agree with this piece. There are so many types of lifestyles and complications in nearly every subject and the world is made of subjectivity but thats what life is: a string of multiple turning, twisting, overlapping and maybe even repeating roads. This piece sums up the rise and fall of a life, and the reminiscence of childhood we all feel throughout our lives. Great job!
There is something so beautifully bittersweet in your life's expressions here... the wonder and joy of childhood fading into mist as one grows older... May we find somehow that it isn't ever too late.
I am a 22 yr old medical student..though not a traditional writer, I write what i feel with words coming from my heart...i think if words are given the right path they can penetrate deeper than sword... more..