The reality of life

Well this is my first writing..this article is based on the reality of life.after seeing the youth being mislead i thought it was important to refresh their soul and guide them towards a content life

                           The Reality of Life

As a child is born he is innocent and angelic. He repeats what you say and follows what you do. His sweet little acts are a source of joy for the whole family. This is undoubtedly the most cheerful stage of life. As he grows up he learns a lot of things, while most of them are productive others aren’t. He is shown a lot of paths in front of him and has to decide which one to follow. He follows one, then another and quickly realizes that his life is not going in the right direction. This is not what he always wanted to do. He gets depressed and hopeless. He spends most of his life in this misery. Things get very tough for him. He doesn’t know where to go, who to look up to. It is only when he gets old that he realizes the true meaning of life. Perhaps it was the innocence, the purity that was missing throughout his adulthood. He indulged into things which were materialistic, virtual and unrighteous. This is the reason why one goes back into his childhood as he gets old. But by that time it is too late. If only he could go back in time and undo his wrong deeds. Thus it is necessary that we start giving importance to the basic principles of life and stay away from the worldly desires so that we won’t have to contrite for our deeds when we get old and feeble.

Author's Note

Please ignore any grammar mistakes. The Target of this article is the youth,it would be highly appreciable if you rate and review this article and also let me know of the shortcomings as it is my first writing.

Reviews

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Hi Talal, I think you are a natural, you write brilliantly and I could not detect any grammatical errors. Keep writing, this is a solid effort, I thoroughly engaged with your perceptions of this young boy's development and your philosophical stance was mature and enhanced the piece greatly, Well done.

[Talal Hussain]

thank you so much mam...honored you liked it :-)

[KarinaT]

You're an observant and natural writer who seems to observe the tragedy that an spiritually malnourished life with the focus on the materialistic and transient creates. Well written and thought provoking. I'd like to hear more from you.

[Talal Hussain]

Thank you so much....

[dunnia]

very nice keep on writing :)

[Talal Hussain]

Thanks :-)

[Fictioneer]

This piece is written with feeling and knowledge that some writers take years to accomplish; you my friend have what it takes to learn from others and use that knowledge to improve you gift. Always remember the difference between knowledge and wisdom and then go from there. On a scale from 1-10, I give this piece a 8. Great work!

[Talal Hussain]

Thank you so much :-)

[Fictioneer]

My pleasure :)

[Summer'sBreeze]

A wonderful write!
Keep up the good work. :)

[Talal Hussain]

Thanks :-)

[Lunette Lariz]

This is ouch.. "He gets depressed and hopeless. He spends most of his life in this misery. Things get very tough for him. He doesn't know where to go, who to look up to." I got hit by these sentences lol!

This is very reminiscing. And truthful, naturally. I can also relate! ^.^

[Talal Hussain]

Thank you so much...i wrote what i felt :-)

[Lunette Lariz]

My pleasure. :)

That's good! I remember my dearest teacher before once said that, when we are to write, we should always write from our hearts. :) Keep writing!

[Muhammad Ibraheem]

it is quite good and real :)
keep writing this type of stuff

[Talal Hussain]

Thank you :-)

[Muhammad Ibraheem]

its my pleasure :)

[Tex]

Very nice. I have Dyslexia so cannot comment on spelling (because often words are spelled different each time I look at them), however I can see the thought behind the words, and the emotion behind the thoughts.

I liked this. It gives me a glimpse into a culture and way of thinking I would never be able to know or see if I had not seen your piece. I live in New Hampshire USA, so my view of life is framed by the place I grew up.

I suggest you look for places the thought changes enough so you can make a new paragraph, then see if you can make several paragraphs. It will make reading your piece easier for the reader (look at this review and you will see how something can be broken up into paragraphs).

Have you ever thought of writing in the style of poetry? The way you express yourself fits that style very well.

You might want to review my poem "I'll Not Throw In The Towel " it is an example of telling a life story in the style of Poetry.

Nice job. Keep on writing.

[Talal Hussain]

Thank you so much...Yes i will definitely try poetry..thanks for the suggestions :-)

[Tex]

:-)

[Meallea Pomorette]

I can totally relate...
"As he grows up he learns a lot of things, while most of them are productive others aren’t." ... I experienced that and I still have doubts with mine...
"He doesn’t know where to go, who to look up to." ... It's difficult to look for the right person who is going to serve as a role model...
I think I saw some punctuation errors... No need to worry with that... Punctuation is really tricky sometimes...
It's nice and I really like it...

[Talal Hussain]

Thank u so much :-) sure I'll work on the punctuations..

[Meallea Pomorette]

No problem ...
(^_^)