Let Me Sleep Tonight

This came from the bottom of my heart.

 

Let Me Sleep Tonight

Let me sleep tonight,

And everything will be alright.

This is my time to fight,

And to climb the height.

 

I will not be alone,

So go ahead and answer the phone,

A David can give the two dogs a bone.

Has my bravery not yet shown?

 

Don’t think it’s all about me,

I am fine, I swear. See?

Right now…please just let me be.

Go get that cat out of the tree.

 

Yeah, I feel a lot of pain,

But it’s not worse than my shame.

What left do I have to gain?

I think I went too far down the wrong lane.

 

Please just kill me now,

I don’t even care how.

I don’t want to die again; I don’t want to take another bow.

I wont go without a pow.

 

Help me please,

I am now on my knees.

I’m soley staring at the seas.

I begging you…please.

Reviews

[Flow~]

At times all we really need is peace, peace in our hearts and peace of mind. People like to help but sometimes in doing so they cause us more pain where a simple sleep in the warmth of the rest filled night is all that we really need. I think this poem expresses some strong emotions and even its message is good. I also feel that maybe a few changes to certain words would drive your points home more. Well done~

[Crow]

Very nicely written.

[Samantha]

i enjoyed it... I thought it brought out alot of things, ecspecially the pain some people can go through. Good job!

[hannah]

A very expressive poem and a great work of art. Well constructed and rhyming. We all want peace in our lives to the point that we sometimes beg for it. You've shown it clearly in this poem, using simple words. Beautifully written even though its a bit sad.

Well done. I look forward to reading more of your poems.

[black_rose_obsession]

i think it is definatally well-constructed, its a wok of art good job!

[Ryan]

Love it, seems a little sad and forlone to me. The rhyming is little forced but otherwise, fantastic, this poem tells a story, but it's not in plain site, which is my favorite type of poem. Excellent job.

[Su' Nacnetaf]

Overall this is a good poem, but rhymes seemed to be forced into this writing. Some poems are not meant to be rhymed, maybe you could try exploring different ways of writing, though this is only my opinion, possibly this is just your style and fits quite well. Good writing.