When The Time Comes

This is a poem i wrote from my heart. You crush it, i crush you.

 

When The Time Comes

When the time comes,

It doesn’t matter who was right or wrong.

It doesn’t matter the mountains that were climbed,

And it doesn’t matter if you had help or not.

It doesn’t matter who your friends were,

Or even if you had any.

 

When the time comes,

It doesn’t matter if you go to church,

It doesn’t matter if you believe in God.

It doesn’t matter what was right,

Nor what was wrong.

It just doesn’t matter any more.

 

When the time comes,

It doesn’t matter who won the argument.

It doesn’t matter who started it,

It doesn’t matter who finished.

It doesn’t matter who your favorite team was,

It doesn’t matter what team you hated.

 

When the time comes,

It doesn’t matter what you liked to do.

It doesn’t matter what your favorite sport was,

It doesn’t matter what you were good at,

What you weren’t.

It doesn’t even matter what book you liked.

 

When the time comes,

You realize that nothing really matters.

By the time we are gone,

Buried among the dead,

It doesn’t matter what was what,

Because then it’s all away.

 

When the time comes,

All memories are forgotten,

And you turn to dust.

When your dust blows through the wind,

The one closest to you shall feel it,

And then they shall feel your presence.

 

When the time comes,

You’ll realize everything was just a dream.

Anyone that hurt you,

Made you feel good,

Anyone who pretended to be your friend.

All memories of the past, yet just figures in your mind.

Reviews

[Yuvia Chairez]

I like this, Very emotional poem... particularly the last verse,

"You'll realize everything was just a dream.
Anyone that hurt you,
Made you feel good,
Anyone who pretended to be your friend.
All memories of the past, yet just figures in your mind."

It reminds me of the song "The Other side" -- "You don't take nothing with you, dear and you can't take nothing back, I ain't never seen a hearse with a luggage rack..."

[theunknownchick]

3 words buddy. THIS. IS. AMAZINNG!

[Julio Angel Ortiz]

Strong ending there. Good overall; the problem is that it feels a little repetitive in the first half. You break things up in the second half in your word choice, which is a wise choice and lends itself to a stronger ending.

[Honeypot]

I think you made a lot of profound statements in this one. The ending had a sad feel to it, but I think you did a good job of writing it.

[Kgosi]

wow... wait a sec.... nice... really nice, i dont know what to say.... just tyat it was a great piece. keep up the spirit.

[Through the Gateway]

That's pretty bleak. I can see your analyzation of life as a fading memory after death. I don't neccessarily agree with it, but I think you got your point across vividly. The poem is well written and carries your message from beginning to end.

...cookie? :)